Across Eternities

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Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running

I love it!

LVL. (Max)

My body was sore. It was painful to move any muscle in my body. Mother had lost her balance because of the explosion and we had fallen down headfirst due to momentum. To protect me and Shizuku mother held us tightly in her embrace and turned around. She cushioned us with her body. The warmth from her embrace was a relief to my aching body.

"What do you mean you didn't know?" The female journalist asked in taunting manner.

"Brahhhhh"

The novel at the beginning was alright, you could see the basic premises of where the story will go but around the end of volume 1 it got.... boring. The multiple povs and showing the future is what dissapointed me the most, idc bout your crappy english im reading the story to see how far the protagonist will go and not the future of the protagonist. Honestly I thought Earth 2 would have the same structure as Earth Prime but it didnt. Now theres heros wtf? Lord Shadow became a hero? When he first arrived at Earth 2 and destoyed the meterorite he was called the Dark Knight but then in like 2 chapters hes called by a ****ty name and now theres a rich guy using his blood to create super soldiers. *Sigh* The beginning was good it wasnt great but I held on because I thought this novel was different. I was right. It became boring.P.S - (This is just me rambaling on but yeah) Dont use caps when the system is showing something, its hard to read, use brackets it shows that you at least care but how much you present yourself. Also whats with showing all his skills, pillars and items at once (dont know cause I always skiped it when he showed the status) it looks stupid, use sections and sub sections. Have you not read video game novels? The author shows great care in there work by putting brackets in when the system is doing something. I mean why would you use caps when the system is talking, its hard to read as well as the fact that its ugly. Have you never proof read your work?