Into the Rift: Akali

Good novelKeeps the reader on the edge.Nobody saw the Vael dying on the fifth chapter.System feels natural part of the story instead of over explanation.

The book not like any other book l read before. I don't really like book with few chapters released but when l got to chapter 5 my interest for this book was up in the roof. Each chapter you read make you want to read more and more not caring aboit the time ect.

He was very curious as to what was in this young lady's body but regardless he decided to wait until she was awake rather than touching her while she was still sleeping, he didn't want a bad misunderstanding between his newly made disciples. " Sigh, should I raise this girl as my little sister or send her to a nice family. Ahh whatever I will wait for her to get a bit older before I ask her this question and besides I won't need to teach her cultivation until she is at least ten." Lin Long Tian spoke in his heart.

As the tears continuously fell down her cheeks, with his warmth all around her skin and his hands gently caressing her back to calm her down, Ysabelle was only thinking of one thing.

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"But..."

This review is my honest opinion as I felt about it while reading it. DO NOT judge this novel from my review and I will recommend reading few chapters before you judge it.That said, here's my review for the author.Concept was great and kinda not boring. Early chapters was great. However once the girlfriend was introduced, it became the flowery speech contest where both of them start speaking like some poets with increasingly cringe worthy lines. Taf will always start speaking in jargon which will test the limits of your patience especially if May is around. I read till around chapter 80 after which I just couldn't carry on. In my opinion, once a while is ok but the current amount is just unbearable Short chapters-I could skip 10 chapters and still guess what happened before. My opinion: either increase chapter size or story paceStory-One thing I always hated in novels is how the part of the so called grand destiny is revealed super early in the novel. I already know that they are in the lower planes.. the sect that they supposedly going to is super weak.. their country is weak.. There is a plane of gods from where the draconian(mc grandma character) came from. All these points should be slowly revealed in due time.My opinion: future plot should be revealed over a period of time. That dream was unnecessary. The trial could have been handled in a more better way.

Obligatory Author’s review. This book is a rewrite for my COPYCAT series. Please comment your critiques and help me improve my writing. Thank you! And ENJOY!