CERITA CINTA PRIA KEMBAR

*author this is just a review and some suggestions only*.I have enjoyed reading your story . author I want to point out some point from your novel. your mc have many abilities but he never use them properly. he has died many times and so he has gain many abilities but you never explained properly about all his abilities and which part of hisbody has(only some abilities like aura, poison, blood breath ony mentioned) (whereas he died so many times with different things in lab in church and so he must have many abilities) (how about you specific point out all the ability he got in one of your chapter) his revive condition is only death. that means your m. c will never die? (I mean how come his sole got revived after being devored? maybe you could more explanation to actual power of m. c) after his death you have not specified any time (means how much time after he get revived since its a ability how about you give specific time after which he get revived) (what I am trying to say is your story start to contradict itself -means once you wrote he revived after few hours like 10 hours in church. but here in the pirate ship he got revived within few minutes after death I mean when floor start making hole and getting destroyed it should not be hours right? (how about write that ability got upgrade and so he he can revive faster-it may explain this) the main point is that your mc is getting more and more abilities but he never use them properly and where ever he stays he doesn't last long I mean it's nearly 40 chapter but he has stayed in habitable environment only for few years but than he is older than 10000 years  I get it that he has unbreakable will but still after dying for 10000 years in space (lonly) and still no physiology change (I mean you might have to explain this bit)how about you write that he stays in specific place for longer time and he go through many incident and have character development. you have not explain how time go different in different places. power level of m. c is also in doubt (I mean whole ability idea was skill,double level? but does the skill and strength of m. c doesn't depend on level? ( I mean after he dies by someone his level doubles from the person who kill m.c ? so question here is does m. c skill does not depend on his level? I mean he dies from frog (level 5) so he become level 10 ? (now level 10 should not be where high level zone? right? now suddenly he goes see the elder who is at very high level and still at level 10 m. c aura still able to affect the elders? (I mean how? should not his ability power get low along with is level?) now when to consider whether he dies of wepon Or person? (I mean during church the priest killed m. c with knife but there he was considered dead by priest so he gain priest power. But when business man killed him with gun  he get gun power(projectile). how does it considered weather he killed by weapon or person? (I mean if someone kill him with sword so will he get sword property or will he get ability from person? (explanation needed) *please do continue write your story don't drop it*

hope it interesting for the viewers. ...

"The equipment is ready, Master." Jester said while looking down saluting.

*whoossh*

As he spoke, he grabbed Yan Xiangma sleeve, ready to haul him home.

Bumalik Naman Tayo sa labas Ng impyerno at tungkol Naman sa mga nangyayare kila Might at sa Six Skirmish..

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