Black Lion

I loved the characters and especially the protagonist, the way you wrote it is pretty amazing, and I haven't seen any grammatical errors I've read so far. I'm excited to see how it goes as I read through more chapters and I'm wishing you all the best with the story! Keep up the good work!

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The story is nice but it needs improvement in part of the explanation.Also Make bed scenes little more explainable

"What was that now, boy?" A voice sounded above my head and I felt a breath of air on my neck.

Their fingers were not short at all, and they could be considered slender. Because Gu Jiajia did not need to do farm work, her skin was white and delicate, while Tang Huai had to work. Although her skin was white, it was not as delicate as Gu Jiajia's, so looking at it, her fingers were shorter than Gu Jiajia's.

Pink shot up from his chair and bowed deeply.

He is definitely doing this on purpose...

Riding their motorcycles up beside the caravan trucks, they began to shoot into them. The sudden shooting caused an initial panic. Within this panic is when the small raid team took their action. Activating a jammer, the trucks lost their contact. Then they aimed their bullets at the truck tires, making them swerve along their path and lose control. Steering out of their way, Camo excellerated to the front, wanting to overtake the lead and cause further chaos.