Great story nice background settings great exolanations
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Well written ,but i found the tittle little unappropriate ,though he's a Scientist back then in his past life he doesn't manage to show he's knowledge , What i mean is He only depends on the system
It lacks thrilling moments and schemes which i like most... But the story is promising i just feel it lacks something more.... I just read it from early stage but lets read for more updates to know how the story develops
What is going on with the pacing...
Also, him being a scientist have 0 relevance to the development of the story after rebirth. For someone that was betrayed by someone he loved and saw his entire colleague die with him, his actions seem too carefree and thoughtless.
It's a typical facesmacking and admired type protagonist.
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Super rod in Quality I'll have to character development and their relationships between all of the characters I think there needs to be more information about where they come from hope I hope to see more updates and thanks for the writing
Let me preface this review by stating the obvious: "THIS NOVEL DESPERATELY NEEDS AN EDITOR". now that that is out of the way I will continue.
The bad: poor grammar, poor capitalisation / punctuation (often none, at all) and comically long run on sentences (I think I saw one paragraph long sentence with 6 "and"s in it back around chapter 10). The author is overly reliant on Autocowrong and it shows. How the novel flows would suggest that the author is not a native English speaker, and if that is the case then kudos for your effort friend, but you need an editor.
There is a gaming term called Ludonarrative Dissonance, which describes the disconnect between a games narrative (the story) and the gameplay. In this work the author creates a similar dissonance by introducing a "genius scientist" which is overly reliant on his system and fails to have a single original thought. The overly ****** dialogue compounds this. It is hard to convince readers that your MC is a genius when he speaks in either short and choppy or long run on sentences.
The meh: what could be fantastic fight chapters and power gains are glossed over instead of expanded on. The lack of detail transforms the elements which this genre typically does best into fluff; glossed over and quickly forgotten.
The good: all the things which make this genre great are present; there is a solid foundation to build on.
Closing thoughts: please, please... find an editor.
This story is really good. The progress is going good.. Author has done good work explaining relationship between characters. The MC is Op and the update stability is the best. Author keep up the good work and let the chapters rolling.
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Hope we have some scientific in this novel 140 characters ggfgcggfhffxydufgjshfzjdjtzyksjgsdkysjgdgjsmgzngdmgsmhxmghdmgdmgsmydmhx mhxdkcmgzmgxmgzkgdkgdgmxhmdhmdmhxhmxhmxmhxmhxhmxhmkh
Also, him being a scientist have 0 relevance to the development of the story after rebirth. For someone that was betrayed by someone he loved and saw his entire colleague die with him, his actions seem too carefree and thoughtless.
It's a typical facesmacking and admired type protagonist.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing
Let me preface this review by stating the obvious: "THIS NOVEL DESPERATELY NEEDS AN EDITOR". now that that is out of the way I will continue.
The bad: poor grammar, poor capitalisation / punctuation (often none, at all) and comically long run on sentences (I think I saw one paragraph long sentence with 6 "and"s in it back around chapter 10). The author is overly reliant on Autocowrong and it shows. How the novel flows would suggest that the author is not a native English speaker, and if that is the case then kudos for your effort friend, but you need an editor.
There is a gaming term called Ludonarrative Dissonance, which describes the disconnect between a games narrative (the story) and the gameplay. In this work the author creates a similar dissonance by introducing a "genius scientist" which is overly reliant on his system and fails to have a single original thought. The overly ****** dialogue compounds this. It is hard to convince readers that your MC is a genius when he speaks in either short and choppy or long run on sentences.
The meh: what could be fantastic fight chapters and power gains are glossed over instead of expanded on. The lack of detail transforms the elements which this genre typically does best into fluff; glossed over and quickly forgotten.
The good: all the things which make this genre great are present; there is a solid foundation to build on.
Closing thoughts: please, please... find an editor.