Autumn fell over, her eyes slowly closing and her body thudding on a mattress. I gasped and flung myself to stop her head from hitting too hard. I caught her head, her hair filled with sweat. She wasn't boding to well, I surveyed the area again.
"Goku will be arriving in three hours, until then," the teenager pulled out a capsule and threw it on the ground, revealing a mini fridge. "here are some drinks." He and the female he was with both took a drink, but the female had appeared to have been shaking the entire time, and they both backed off clear of the mini fridge to allow the others access to the drinks. The gang all got their own drink, with the exception of Piccolo, who had kept his eyes on the new characters in the group. He had no idea of the purple haired boy, but he knew that the female was Gonan, he just wasn't sure about the story behind the situation.
Self-Assessment of My WorkI’ve just realized that I can do a self-assessment, so here’s my take on my work so far.I think it’s turned out pretty well. The premise is interesting, and I’ve worked hard to make the characters stand out as unique individuals, rather than just background NPCs. I try to give each character their own distinct personality to make them memorable.There are a lot of details in the story, but I try to balance them with the pacing so it doesn’t overwhelm the reader. Even though the themes can be heavy at times, the reading experience flows well and isn’t too hard to follow.Of course, there might be the occasional small writing mistake here and there. I’m not a native English speaker, but I always do my best to correct any errors I find.I’m always open to questions and suggestions. However, I can’t guarantee I’ll add every suggestion, as I only make changes that fit with the direction I’ve already planned for the story.Overall, I’m happy with what I’ve created. I think it has a lot of potential, and I’d definitely recommend giving it a chance.
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