[Another shameless author found. Initiation of the wave of hate in progress.] Hello! Everyone I am the author of this novel. It's second try to write this novel. I want to share my imagination and practice my writing and English.The writing quality is probably low for now but it will be improved with time and effort. I hope you can help me with pinpointing the grammar, spelling and logic errors to make this story better. I am using Grammarly but it's basic version and it only shows the basic errors. Thank you for your attention! I hope, all of us will gain something from this story. :)
It's a little fast paced in my opinion especially at the beginning. He doesn't have any attachment to his family figures and it seems a bit forced.The system is introduced too suddenly.Otherwise it's a very interesting concept. I put it in my library
The moment the Goblin touched his weapon that was a rusty sword, Ren activated his ability and began to run as he dragged his sword across the floor and lifted a curtain of dirt.
Rebecca pouted and said while looking towards Robert "we are not kids dad and they were the bad people and everyone was stressed because of them so we just did what we can.. Daddy Did we really did wrong but we really just wanted to help you.. why is it wrong?"
Because, the Torturing Pirate's is a Pirate which came back from the Grand Line, and their strength is without a doubt can easily kill all of the Marine on the Fukis Island at that time, not just their strength, but also their quantity is 3 times than the Marine.
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