Serpent spilled out the secrets buried deeply in his heart as the heftiness in his heart dissipated sedately. Keeping such a tragic story without anyone to shoulder together is really tearing his heart apart day by day, which subsequently drives his mind into chaos every time.
"Hey, are you okay?" An anxious voice questioned me, by a person hot as a coal right beside me on the bed. I was welcomed by an acrid smell and the feeling of a fluffy arm wriggled tightly around me.
" tell me, how did you become my equipment? How did we collaborate with each other, you are fragile flower, and seriously only a flower? Don't tell me I'm carrying you always with your pot around me?" Camila said giving the flower a narrow look. 😒.
A pure white figure descended behind it though, and Maila was entranced by the graceful flow of her wings as she descended from the heavens. Her hair was silver and curly, reaching her shoulders, a thin gold headband crowning her silky hair. She had tanned skin and soft freckles, matched with azure blue eyes that seemed to reflect light like a diamond. She wore a long gown made of white silky material, and had long and powerful wings, which gave her beauty and grace.
I have only problem with one thing and that is your strong hold or your foundation is not strong on your story everything else is really good I mean really good it's just you are taking your story in fast way that's also good thing but you are not developing your main characters feeling not telling us how he feels because if you want to make your correct likeable by everybody you have to show some kind of emotions like anger soup your tea complex and defeating his own emotion by some kind of incident everything, this way he can understand and we can understand that he is developing in the story even though he has power he should understand or you should make us feel that is this character is real in our imagination and the story by showing us or letting us feel his emotion bye elaborating every small details if you can in his life that way you will make your story better even better than this is right now
I don't do this often, actually I never did this, but I'm going to write a second review. My previous review ended with me dropping the beginning of chap 49, and I feel I was being a bit too biased because that day wasn't that great for me, let me just jump in to he review. As of the beginning of chapter 49 up to chapter (??) I have started reading again and found the author does the slow pace of the story well, but interactions could be better (or I just have high standards), writing quality is reading so its a 5, SoU is a 5 b/c there are already chapters for me to read, story development, as I said feels slow, but I wasn't getting into this novel thinking it was going to be on par with my top novels, and even if not on par, story development is still really good so 5, and the slowness doesn't bother me at all, after I started reading again I felt that the character design started improving so good job for that author you get another 5, and world background, can't really make anything of it as of yet so still 3 star. I last review I felt was too harsh, this is the kind of review I would regularly give, keep doing good author.
Different from what you usually find her. The start is dark, and by the time you realize what's happening, you are invested in the story and the style. The author uses colorful language, which might be hard to read if it's not your first language, but very enjoyable.
It's really good for a little light reading. the writing is magnificent, the world seems intriguing, overall its really good. The characters as well. they are really great. (Elijah has to be my favorite)
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