1. Amber was employed by the MC to be his secretary, but I'm guessing the many chapters of Amber not making an appearance caused chatGPT to forget about her existence since in a later chapter, his secretary is someone else?2. All that interaction and romantic tension with Amber and yet the author just kind of forgot about her. When she reappeared it felt more like "Oh damn, I forgot she existed. Better write her back in" from the author.3. The MC already met with the president and yet in a later chapter the president goes "I can finally meet the man of innovation". Either chatGPT memory is lacking or the author is going too fast to the point of forgetting their own story. it wasnt even that long ago of the MC meeting the president before this chapter.4. Almost every dialouge just feels the same. Constant usage of similar phrases and the way every dialogue ends as well is the same. Might want to experiment with dialogue to change stuff up because its hard NOT to notice dialogue feeling and sounding the same when I read them.Overall: I like the story, I just hope the Author puts more attention to detail like with Amber's existence and the MC meeting the president for the first time TWICE. Whether or not the author uses AI in their writing, I dont care, Just pay attention to your own writing and story and avoid these minor inconsistencies. They may be minor in your eyes, but they can really derail a reader from the story since they'll beq+q focusing on the thought of "Didnt he already meet the president though?". There's alot of timeskipping too, maybe thats the cause of these inconsistencies since the story is moving fast, very fast. Hope that from the chapter im currently on, I dont see anymore inconsistencies. what caused me to write this review was really because the MC's secretary wasnt Amber, who was formally employed at the end of a chapter, but a background character.
it's greatt for a first novel but theirs room for improvement ๐๐๐ I believe by reading novel and with time you the author will be able present a wonderful and fantastic story ๐ฏ๐ฏ๐ฏ(PS : 5.0 is because it's your first novel original review was 3.9๐ ๐ )
Story seems nice with catchy synopsis and cover and this book all these things which attracts meThis basically reincarnation novel,well explained story and shows every emotion in perfect wayI had read till 6 chapter and plot impressed me a lot.... reading forwardWriting Quality:4.9/5Character Design:5/5World Background:4.9/5I would like to give this book 4.9/5 starsBest of luck author!
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