This Detective Can't Catch A Break From His Strange Cases

It’s very good has a lot of Potential my only complaint I guess could be that it’s going a little way to fast pace and should kind of slow down and allow the mc to have a better development himself and the other characters. Also better description of the scenes would be awesome but overall great.

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Please Make mc see again, and make mc strong and domineering not a coward author!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And give him a bit of ruthless and coldness

A story with substance. An author taking chances.

Vesmír POV

A delightful smile crossed the two girl's faces. At last Abis had come. They had been waiting for him since morning. Abis was their childhood friend. He was the son of their father's chief advisor. He had a soft corner for the girls though they never utilised it or even cared. Abis had a strong built with greats skills. He was as fearless as the girls & always preferred to support them. Abis was the only one whom the girls trusted.

"Well, I can't seem to remember some things from my past life. I think I suffer from partial memory loss." I replied while making sure not to leak out my surprise and other thoughts. It seemed that we could only hear what the other person wanted us to hear. It was really difficult but I was able to handle it somehow.

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