Maybe the story got better after 30 chapters, but I couldn't keep reading. The whole world hates MC for no reason, yet MC somehow doesn't notice it for 15 years. His decisions are super weird. Instead of buying a potion to cure himself of poison, he buys 2 space storages. like WTF is going on?
the story progressed fine at first, then it became a sorrowful pity party of unfulfilled threats and failed urgency that has the slow burn of a middle school fight. I like the story but I have read at least 8 chapters of petty squabbling, abuse, pointless fevers, and situations that could have been better if more communication and trust was shown instead of naivety.
"There is a rumor that if it could be you, Chloe, Delain or Jessica," Pricilla commented. She poked her. That means they want her to give a reaction on that.
The story has potential, it lacks a lot of correction and editing work, not so much because it is poorly written and the line of action cannot be followed, but because it detracts from the rest of the positive things such as the plot. Perhaps lengthening the chapters a little more by introducing some more situational descriptions would also enrich the text. Good job
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