THE UNBROKEN ROAD

"Commander! What the heck, that was going a little too far don't you think?" Max asked her while trying to hind is surprise at the attack she just delivered to Ash. He didn't even see her grab the pencil from the cup of pens that she had on the mess that she calls her desk.

Effect 3 (Passive). Gives wearer the ability to breathe underwater and enhances swimming abilities.

So they went to Will knowing that Kaye and Kate are watching. They talked, touched and playfully hit Will, they noticed Kaye's expression suddenly turned foul while Kate's expression didn't change, which waas a very enjoyable smile.

"Auria, honey, what are those?" Eve asks uncertainly

                     The younger who follows them finds them as the same people who they want to change in the school but can't . as the people were rusticated from the school of the people ,these people want to take revenge on the people and became the psycho paths of the society and kills many people ....now the 2 brothers understands the situation and want to either change them are to end them .

So what's wrong with taking the back streets?

'That sounds like...'

It looks promising, pacing can be increase more but I personally like slow story building, keeps us link to characters more. I am looking forward to reading more about Ravian story, I am more interested in him than the MC 😅

the overall story is good but how you convey it is the problem