Author, Give the a Redemption Arc, at least make Him neutral good/evil. I read too many Fics with overly Good or Evil Mc. Any ways I read more of your releases hopefully a Mass release. Good luck.
Honestly love the book, and it’s really unfortunate that the ending was extremely rushed.Also, it’s like the author completely forgot about the MC’s other women…
This novel is bland. I don't like any of the characters personalities present at all. The way people are reacting and communicating is disappointing as well. I was intrigued at the start of the novel since it's somewhat similar to Overlord. Once they reached the tavern that's when I started disliking the story. You could have done some world building, develop their personalities,or push us to in the direction that this is a real world and not some game. From what I seen is a novel that makes no sense. The emotions and the reactions of the MC feel forced and cringy. Once they started the dungeon the story just turned to hell due to the revive function and vampires. Sorry but If your just going to make the MC some powerhouse with slaves and have a revive function then story is not going to go far unless you want to make a average novel that's filled with readers that praise your novel for having an OP character with a harem. If you want to improve as an author you need to compare the emotions and world building of your work with great novels that are similar to the genre of yours.
While the young Miss was undercover, he took the time to investigate a bit further into the women that had disappeared and noticed there was a pattern. Every girl would usually disappear for about a week. The next girl than would be taken a weeks later after the return of the previous abductee.
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