The Outer One

I decided to write my first review what had all what I think about this novel.- First of all.... ITS TOOOO SLOW PACED, reminds me about cultivation chat group where basically evry fkng day was mentioned. - Second of all is that MC loves to do some kind of useless ****. Like well... Talk with trash wich takes him like 10 chapters or more. Or do something really stupid and inconsistent. - Third is again. MAGIC. How the hell pple lvl up in there? MC basically SOLO cleans whole dungeon and gets most XP posible BUT THERE ARE PLAYERS WITH LVLS HIGHER THAT HIS?! Like wtf? - Forth is what I mentioned above and more is INFO DUMPS, just one over another. Srsly! I can basically skip entire chapters cause well... Battle wich is not even interesting. - Fifth is magic PVP masters. Game is basically VRMMO so you have to have ability to move in one way or another. Why the hell there are so much combat masters? Like srsly one over another. With their magic lvl ups.- Sixth is just story is getting boring. Like wtf? He does one thing like for 4 chapters with tons of tons of info. Also the SHOW BUT NOT TELL makes me rage. He says WOW SO NICE ITEM.... to get in description in like tons of chapters. - Seventh is that the writes said us that MC is basically 1000y.o cultivator so he has to be like so fkng OP beating evryone easily. But he has to tryhard as it looks like. - Eight is that how the game works.... Giving and boss with like milion HP? For what goddamn reason? Just to waste another 5 chapters with infodumps all over the places. - Ninth is that MC loves to waste time on useless ****. He can take a ploblem just for no reason for himself and later give excuse "I wanted to see how to pvp ingame". He just makes stuff difficult for himself for no apparent reason. Sometimes he looks like clever guy.... But a lot of times he does inconsistent ****.- Tenth is that Enemies that MC meets are over his lvl alwase and the most hatefull are crits. Like why dont you makes One shot abilities? No lets drag the battle for hrs. Why class asassin even exists? Also some class has just insane lvl of difficulty. Like combat master, where somehow you have to make your own skills wich MAGICALLY game can interpret. I'LL. MIGHT ADD MORE LATER. THE PROGRAM IS LAGGING. NICE OPTIMIZATION LOL.

at this point I'm convinced all the writers are forced to be racist. there's no way every time cultivation is rediscovered by humanity Chinese people are de facto world leaders and the whole universe speaks Chinese.the nationalism in these sci-fi Eastern novels is too much it really takes away from the whole world

Dear Author, why? I‘m trying to make this constructive so: 1) Please don‘t bite off more than you can chew in future works. You tried too many directions without delving into them and ultimately abandoning the plot. Examples would be the cultivation families that are somehow irrelevant, the pet that gets completely forgotten, the death prince‘s schemes  etc. 2) Not every character needs to be relevant, but if you focus a lot of attention on them they should play a role in the novel. Examples are the successor of the death realm, and most frustratingly LUCIFER 3) consistency (plot holes) Example should be Shu getting Alice kidnapped without any repercussions and he and MC are still best friends years after??? What?

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Hello, Secret_Ethereal here,A supportive readers and a fellow author. Please keep your hard work. I'm a good judge of book and I could see your book has a potential in the future. Cheer up and don't lose your interest in writing just because you still not find the right person to appreciate your masterpiece. I'm rooting for a new chapter.

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