The New Experience

Overall the story is a cute idea following this highschooler through the akwardness and tribulations of being a teenager. There are several places in the story where things could be fleshed out better however, especially the characters. The only relationship we see fleshed out here is between Dashuan and Ray, and even there we still get too much uneccesary fluff that tells us very little about the characters. Jesicca also starts as a manic pixie dream girl, and isn't given much character development. We still see her as this unrealistic idea of what a teenage girl is like.

And don't be afraid to give your characters each authentic voices! I often found you using the same slang with each character, including Jessica (even though she's foreign).

Lots of potential here! Please proofread your work and make your characters shine! We don't need to know all the specifics of bball!

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This book is something else, love it sooo much

Really great so far would love to be able to read it faster

32 chapters 10-7-2024

Don't bother reading this book. This is the absolute definition of a TRASH!

I’ve really enjoyed this book as much as I’ve enjoyed all the other books in this series. I love the way you’re taken on a journey and really get to fall in love with the characters. Can’t wait for the next bonus chapters and other stories. Thank you!