The Lysander Family

if you see, I was exposed, than you know it will be bad.

any poison tester here.....................

The most lovable part of this book is the background story of the different characters. The build up is lit. Good job.

Story is good, just need someone to edit the grammar. The only problem is when explaining every new thing it’s very long and I just end up reading a little of the necessary information and skip through the rest. The other problem is when explaining things it ruins the flow of the story it is up to such as when a character show up with a new weapon, the story is flowing then that whole chapter is just a full on description of the grade, type of material and other thing that are just being unnecessarily introduced at the wrong time. Well that my rant.

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this is absolutely amazing the writing and grammar can Improve but overall it's really good, I just wish you don't make the mc a pushover

Since the lake was so small, it was easy for her to keep an eye on the both of them. None of the three were afraid to lose sight of the others.

  Mei's patience level had lost. She went towards them and then slapped them harder until both of them stopped talking and looked towards May.