the lesbian gold digger

After reading the first 20 chapters, I've gotten a good impression of the novel. Although it kinda reminds of another novel I read, I like the idea. Hope this one gets picked and gets updated!

The author doesn't seem to know what kind of story this should be.So, imagine a cultivation world. Is it a cultivation story? No, the main character dies. But they are reborn in a different world. Oh, it's an isekai? No, they return to their first world through a VRMMO. Hey, that's the title of the story! But they also get a system, with an AI, and nobody else has that. But it's not really a system story either.Many threads are brought up, but abandoned before they can do anything interesting. The game prevents the MC from using their prior cultivation techniques. Oh, but there might be workarounds (through the shadow clone, or eaching others). Is the MC going to do something clever to get their old techniques back? Nope, once he gets the system that restriction goes away. Nevermind then.He wants to take his human-form snake followers and take over the criminal underground. Sounds exciting! Just kidding, he dumps them on the side of the road. I guess the snakes are off in the interesting story, while we just follow the terrible MC around.Everything is like this. Oh, there's an annoying girl at school that the MC keeps rejecting but she won't get the message. Just kidding, the MC totally loves her now. Let's get married on the first date.My point is, there are deep problems with the story. The author often retcons their own story (protip: rather than add stuff to the *past*, you can actually go back and edit those chapters when those events were the *present* and put your changes there), So the foundation is constantly shifting. And that's not even touching on the many grammatical and other mistakes. I suspect the author is not very experienced in English. But even if an editor fixed these problems, the story problems would remain.The premise is interesting, but other stories have used this same premise much more effectively. The earlier chapters are OK, but there is a drop in quality later.This story can best serve as a rough outline for what the author really wants, but they have to figure that out. Finish this story, but don't drag it out. Then start rewriting it, after you have a firmer grasp of the overall plot.

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You have a way with words. Thank you for spending the time to write this novel. It’s truly beautiful. I don’t remember the last time I read something this good. It’s quite amazing, and I hope you publish more things soon.

Tidak seperti karakter di cerita Novel yang lain,MC cerdas dan tidak arogan,tahu mana yang menjadi prioritas dan mana urusan yang tidak perlu dicampuri..sayang update lambat

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I dunno if it stuck with the magic or started off with cultivation itd have been up my alley but the transition so early on kinda made me lose interest both settings are cool but just not my cup of tea