The Law God - Artic

Hi, I'm the author of the book, voting for my own book as a classic webnovel tradition. Don't be fooled by me:)

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Hi, I'm the author of the book, voting for my own book as a classic webnovel tradition. Don't be fooled by me:)

Hi, I'm the author of the book, voting for my own book as a classic webnovel tradition. Don't be fooled by me:)

I like the idea of the story I also like the main character but holy feck does it get difficult to read my man needs an editor. It’s gotten to the point where I’m not sure if I should be choosing to drop such a good idea or struggle having to read the broken English and **** grammar. Mr author please get an editor skilled in your native language and in English so you can turn this amazing idea into a readable book

An interesting book.
here goes my random thoughts :
"To think There is only one age to be happy, just one time in each person's life when it is possible to dream, make plans, and have enough energy to fulfill them despite all the difficulties and obstacles. One age to be enchanted with life to live passionately and enjoy everything with all the intensity, without fear or guilt of feeling pleasure. The golden phase in which we can create and recreate life in our own image and likeness, clothe ourselves in all colors, taste all flavors and indulge in all loves without prejudice or shame. Time of enthusiasm and courage when all willingness to try something again and again as often as needed. This fleeting age in our lives is called the present and lasts for the instant that passes."

I have to drop this story. I tried, but the writing is among the worst I have ever seen. You don't read what you write, because first an ability is called X and in the next paragraph is called Y. Many of the characters are genderless, because you use he and she for the same person. If you rewrite this story with the help of an editor I think it can be a good story.

The story has a good concept. With people studying Laws and becoming stronger, this whole idea has a huge scope for development.

But author has competely messed it up. His character goes from some Justice League type Hero to a guy who will kill anyone within 10-20 chapters. He happily demands money using intimidation. And honestly, I have no problem with it. But so fast? What about inner conflict? What about character development? His personality transition? Nope, nada. One moment he is talking about loving a girl because she is interesting, few chapters later he kill her without any remorse because she insulted him. What? Like honestly?

Next is the character. Robotic. Idiotic. He just goes on and on, no plans, no dreams and no personality. Heck, we don't even know how does he looks. What does he likes. His secret dream. Why does he want to get stronger. Nothing.

Above all, their is no planning in what he chooses. If you are given knowledge of all the things in your previous world, why not go with Quantum Forces, Energy, etc. Quite tough? What about gravity? Physics? Nuclear physics? But what he chooses? Cloud, fog, rain...

Anyway, it's authors personal choice but I wouod have liked to see some preplanning. Some thought in choosing your futures.

The cultivation system. It's weird. It's broken in a bad way.I can't describe it in any other way. Law difficulty and power makes no sense. Like Low God of Crow? What the hell did he study to achieve mastery of 'Crow'. And what makes a crow more complex than microorganisms which MC has chosen. And how did he merge ten laws to turn into a Crow law? Author is probably just bull****ting here. Similarly, what's long way? Law of Long way? Wtf? And believe me, it just gets weirder.

And like a cherry on a top...a rotten cherry. Editing. It's hard to understand anything they say. I have read better sentences while MTLing. Their are so many problems that I don't even know where to start. Some are quite minor, but the major ones make understanding anything impossible.

Author is also trying to make the world vast with a complex developed order structure and power structure. But all the laws just sound stupid and seem like an invitation for a full scale rebellion.


I have many more issues but that's it for now.


Author please get an editor. That itself will add a full three stars to the rating. We can ignore the rest, but poor editing just kills.of the mood to read anything.

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The story is very difficult to read because of the inconsistent writing

I have read 70 chapters and i do think tyis story has potential it was just written by sime one who sucks at the most basic parts of writing. If the author bothered to go back and correct his many obvious mistakes and stoped deleting peoples post because they leave a bad review then this could be on par with some great novels like world of worlocks. Some things he does wrong is:
1. The way he writes makes me think English is is not his first language. Which is not the problem  the problem is he writes so 1 dimensionaly , MC is an ideot that flip flops me then a fish out of water. Dies because of wrandom woman .Promises to live for himself no others. Transports to another world . Gains powers at a stupidly fast wrate .Bumps into wrandom whore gives out precious knouledge about fire for free. Now ***** is never mentioned again.
2. There is no structure he pretends to be careful but, he is as arigent as they come. Does not do basic reserch about brand new world. Ok about killing human for no reson after 1 command from the principal at a school. Should have 0 fighting experience but Does not matter cuz he 1 shot everyone. No one has escape ability despite the people he is fighting are hundreds of years old.
3. Super easy to become a god he does not need to train meditate , explore , get good equipment. Demi god stronger then mid god him. His chess philosophy is super lame i liked his old powers better.
  4. Gods who have lived hundreds and thousand of years are stupid like pre-pubeant ****. When he is on adventure because he is at mid god leven and arthur is only now how there is no one else in story to give an F about he ads more 1 dimensional  mid god beings who tell u ****ty background ove campfire. Insted of being mysterious and all incompassing instead of acting like a lvl 10 adventure group.
There are many problems this is just the tip of them i just hope Arthur fixs them so story can actually be good.

It has an interesting premise but shallow characters, hurried scenes and a really subpar writing.
Had to drop it for now, might pick it up again in the future if it gets edited and maybe a bit revised.