meanwhile the other female kids looking disgusted at lucio, but the male only looking at him with understanding gaze, they know Anna body temptation more than him, and almost all of the male in class have imagine Anna body at last once,yes once a day.
Hi, everyone. Well, I waited until I reached 100 chapters to have time to think about what to say in this review (And it didn't work. I still don't know what to say. But I'll try).I will use Webnovel's own system to try to give my view on what I think of this story so far (as a writer, since I don't have the perspective of a reader). So, if you have given the story a chance and disagree with something I say, feel free to share your opinion politely, please.Writing Quality: Incredible, at first I was already unsure of what to say.Well, I'm not sure, but I think it's more than evident to you that I translate the chapters, right? So, although I currently use spell checkers, where most of the errors found are character names, the word "mana" or words like Ancient written with a capital letter, maybe a lack of commas sometimes too, I can't say how my writing quality in English (in the case of the translation) would be categorized.Story Development: In my view, this started happening now. Not because it's too dragged out, so much so that it took 100 chapters for something to happen, but because the chapters before 81 didn't have an average word count, like the 2,000 I have now, and, something I noticed a while ago, I think I spent too much time and words describing things, even though it could have been done more quickly (I'm trying to reduce that now, although describing is something I enjoy doing).Dialogues are a separate issue, I think I do have a problem writing dialogues. I'm trying to improve, and I don't know if there's anything else I can say about it.I believe that the coherence and consistency, both of the characters and the world, are okay so far, as they are all under construction.As for the pacing, it falls into the same "problem" I mentioned earlier about the chapters before 81. A lot happened in them, many important things. However, at least for me, I have the feeling when rereading everything that the same things could have been written with fewer chapters.Oh, and don't get me wrong. I'm not saying that the chapters from 81 onwards don't have these same problems, just that, in my opinion, they have been reduced.Character Design: As far as I remember, it's okay too. I don't keep reinforcing the physical appearance of the characters all the time, but I believe I described enough in their first appearances. As for the personalities, except for Hye, I think few have had enough time to show theirs.Update Stability: This is indeed a problem. For example, since it's the hundredth chapter, I wanted to make it a bit longer than the others, so it ended up with 3,500 words, I think. But it should have been even longer. The problem is that after the first thousand words, it takes me a long time to write the rest. If I write a thousand words in almost 1 hour, I only reach 2,000 after at least 4 hours (A time that my phone can't stay charged...), that is if I don't have to finish the next day because I can't think of the ending (Which happened with chapter 100. I started it on Saturday and finished it only on Sunday night). I will try to write extra chapters and save them to post even when I can't finish writing the chapters, but I think that will take a while still.World Setting: I used to think this was also a problem, so much so that, if you notice, I don't describe much the environments outside the dungeons and that are actually real places, because I've never been there. But now, I will try to pay more attention to this, either through photos or other means, I will try to find ways to describe these places more accurately from now on.To conclude, I wanted to let you know that the synopsis does not refer to the protagonist, but to a character who appeared in chapters 97 and 98 (the two that, honestly, I enjoyed writing the most so far).I think that's it. If I forgot something, it's because I'm sleepy (it's 4 in the morning now, and I finished chapter 100 a little earlier). Thank you for reading this and, if you decide to give this story a chance or have already done so, thank you as well.
I just finished the chapters that are available to read and the book is well written and presented the author try to give you vibe that you and the main character will see and understand the world and powers together there have been some bits that are confusing but you get a after some time I wish I could tell people more about this book but there is just 8 chapters is there is not that information to talk about thanks to author for writing a good and interesting book
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