This novel is fantastic! The grammar is better thsn 99% of novels on the platform, and the story is super intriguing! 💯I know that this novel only has 19 chapters right now but that chapters are long, making them feel like I've read double the amount. The character development is pretty good too. For example, you can see the mc slowly losing touch with his emotions as he continues to put on his mask and act as "Null".It's super good and I 100% recommend it.👍
This is a great story. At the time of this review the author has 'dropped' the story, which is super common for any story on this site that is decent-good.The only con is that while this story is very engaging, the MC monologues inner thoughts a lot and with how little story there is, it leaves little plot development. It doesn't detract from the story, but it does mean there is less going on and more standing in a daze thinking.I have to say that from reading, the story line flows really smoothly. The plot, which in most cultivation novels branch out everywhere seemingly without direction, has a very clear path to progression. Here is hoping that the author rekindles their spirit for writing.I see that wile you stopped posting the story a few weeks ago, you are still reading on this site as of yesterday. ;)
Idea of the story is intriguing but the English really diminishes the quality significantly. What's more, there's way too much dialogue and the fact that exposition is not used to describe what is going on also makes it a pain to read.If your character is tired, then describe how he is tired, not say "*in a tired voice*" and be done with it, that's just lazy and unprofessional.There's also no indication of who is speaking most of the time so you're left wondering who is talking and the lack of exposition also makes the characters look boring. I'm here to read a story, not to uncover the mysteries of what you're writing. If I have to spend extra effort to understand what you're writing, then I might as well not read it.
wow, i was binging reading the past 2 days, gotta say that the world building at start and the mystery was very interisting but it crashed in less than 30 chaps, the MC simply starts convincing people to joining him without any convincing, he just says come and people came... I don't see the MC being charismatic, and he gives no reason to... 1 time or 2 ok, but the way he convinced the grandmaster and was sure she was gonna obey was too forced, the number of 2D characters in this war arc was too much, all the kings and people in power are generic and simple forced to act simply to force a developtment, without convincing the reader... i guess the sin of the author was not to put a convincing insite of the characters thinking to make plauseble there actions... after this grandmaster being called vivi out of nowhere and became a obedient little puppy i just dropped... which is a shame since i liked the worldbuilding...
Finishing her cooking she quickly dropped the pad into the sink and sat down to eat, checking her watch every 5 minutes to make sure she's not late for his first day of school. Quickly finishing up her breakfast she juggled to put her socks on and filled get backpack with goodies and ran out the door.
"You're tricking me! I'm not going to turn around! I'll believe you, but help me! AHH AHH They're getting closer!" Liu Jing quickened up once more even though he was getting tired.
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