The glitched one: Backrooms

"3….2...1, GOO!!!" Yelled both boys in unison.

"If it was 4:00 p.m.the time you meet with him then what did you do for about one hour?"

        Both went out and started to play hide-and-seek game. Jack, "okay, you hide anywhere and search and find you this time since am good at searching things." Smile Jack with proud of his ability in finding. Mary replies, "But don't forget am good in hiding." So both started the game. Jack is counting the numbers from 1 to 100 while Mary heads to hide where ever she likes. While their game is going on well, Jack searching and looking for Mary looks around everywhere but could not find. As he was going behind a huge tree hoping Mary could be hiding he steps forward and look around the tree behind. Suddenly Jack gives up saying, "Mary you win now come out where ever you're hiding, the game is over." saying this he steps towards a wooden plank road where he finds the sparkling light, it was really a light, a sparkling light as Mr. Woong pang had told the story about his mother and the adventure which a sparkling light was mentioned. Jack tells to Mary in a loud voice,  "Mary i found the sparkling light now come out of your hiding place like a good kitty." Mary on hearing this come out of her hiding place and goes to the place where Jack was standing and staring at a sparkling light. Mary exclaimed on seeing that sparkling light being amaze by its bright light, "Whoa, am i dreaming? so beautiful! Jack how did you find it?" Jack feeling proud that he found it, says to her pleasingly, "Aww, poor little thing she could not find it but by someone else who handsome and brave like me."

Ofcourse Shan Cai loves to eat and the food she ordered were here favorites too. With in thirty minutes all the dishes were finished.

Demons/Devils/Whatever are just another race. It's just that they have great affinity to the dark element so there's a higher chance of them committing crimes or have mental problems.

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I see him roll up the quest and put it into his bag, then turn to me.

Seeing my reaction, she started to laugh, but she didn't let me go.

Their next course of action startled the four of them. The villagers along with the children knelt down before them.

Good job love it hope it won't be dragged for so long as I am looking forward to the unfolding of the story otherwise am glued like no man's business 😊👍👌🏾

Alright First Of All I am Really Happy To Be Contribute My Writing In The Same Phases As This Novel."Gods's Journey In A New Time"- is a fantasy, Action Novel But I think it Might Set A good plot in future volumes as far i read it,it has a great story building just need to work a bit in plot cuz its still not clear enough & character designing is very good in my point of view I am giving it a solid 4.0 for overall presentation

Setting is interesting, some characters are neat but the story is woefully inconsistent. The author writes things and then either ignores them or forgets about them. This leads to ham fisted plot devices and inconsistent characters.An example: the character describes a useful feature, the feature is automatically activated, and yet as the plot advances you realize it could have only happened in the way it did if the feature didnt work.Characters will say things to other characters but when the plot requires it its like they never did, like that part of their character only exists when necessary.MC also alternates between extremely foolish and unrealistically smart. Hes more concerned with face slapping than development but also thinks bad people will just be nice again.Oh and also, I feel this needs to be said he is very cruel to an innocent woman and I wont say more to spoil that. Its not worth reading beyond free. Author needs to keep track of what he writes about his characters, if he did that he could make full use of an otherwise brilliant setting.