The idea is promising but a few touches need to be made.
1. More paragraphs: Few paragraphs make the work a little overbearing to read so please give paragraphs at most after three to four sentences.
2. Spacing: At the end of certain sentences, there are no spaces giving no difference between the end of a sentence and the beginning of another.
Overall, the plot is nice but it needs some editing.
Keep up the good work by the way. Writing isn't easy
I was enthralled by this story of good and and evil. I believe you are a little closer to the mark than most which makes this story very interesting to read. I was very impressed. I definitely think you should do a follow up. Your writing is very talented. Thank you for an amazing tale. Please more.
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1. More paragraphs: Few paragraphs make the work a little overbearing to read so please give paragraphs at most after three to four sentences.
2. Spacing: At the end of certain sentences, there are no spaces giving no difference between the end of a sentence and the beginning of another.
Overall, the plot is nice but it needs some editing.
Keep up the good work by the way. Writing isn't easy