6th chapter needs reworking, that’s the moth of immersion breaking. The whole thing about muscle memory and that he still can’t adapt to his body just doesn’t make sense
my man's this is the bestest system novel I've read it coincides with my humor and total mentality including but not limited to monke simple silly humor and overall good vibes
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This is an excellent novel with a well thought out beginning and structured storyline. The author has not neglected the set up of the new world and every new character POV adds something to that detail. I like that we see the mc before his reincarnation rather than him simply waking up in a random body with his entire history and past forgotten. Glimpses of his former persona come through in his reasoning and there is logic behind his actions based on that prior knowledge which really adds layers of depth to the character and its really refreshing to read. Keep up the good work!
"Mhm~ it belonged to Kai-kun, but he left it behind, so I watched over it for him. Then I met you guys and we've been together ever since." Moca grinned.
They were too many of them and Jack had failed to realize their goal the Blue Ants in front of him were not trying to kill him but instead were just stalling for time.
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