The Adventurer System

Same clinche poor Mc's family, struggling mc and his sister. Mc tries to give his sister a good life. But I got enough with it.
The starting of the story is so boring. You could have cut that part but you still made the tragic story that was not logical for me.
Sorry, I don't want to know further.

Honestly the story is very interesting, but the grammar is soooo bad it is very hard to read in the beginning chapters you can hardly understand what is going on because of the grammar but it can be fixed if the author decides to do so [img=faceslap]

The story starts strongly with a believable character suffering from an unjust trauma. It's an excellent setting for a weak-to-strong character. The author has a great imagination, give it a try!

Starting Off the grammar Is quite poor with random missing words and sentences that make zero sense to native English speakers. The world background is quite poor with the MC essentially having been attempted murdered but seems nothing happened to that person And MC doesn’t sue or anything. There is no real reason given in the game why the AI decided to skip steps beyond O well. Then when set in the fighting zone MC goes from running and struggling with a single mob to somehow being able to nuke 13 after a single level gain with the fight magically just being complete. The plot armor here would make a nuclear superpower scared to attack. It makes no sense and this ruins the story.

Only got a few chapters in so the high ratings on updating stability and world background are just me giving author the benefit of the doubt. Concept itself, while not necessarily original, is good. But 1) the grammar and writing style (author "mysteriously" leaving out stuff in an to me really annoying way, like there is no motivation for stuff more then whether it is convenient for author or not) are horrible. And 2) characters feel really flat, no realistic emotions from mc. I would give it another try if it was editet to flow better though.

The Story has potential, but the Characters and poorly written, alongside the World Background. Updates are decent and the Writing Quality is the ugh. I'm not good with Grammar myself but your story is full of writing mistakes and jumbled words like for example "I went the to shop" I noticed that a lot where you have 2 words mixed together.

Final Review: 3.2 Star

Me personally, I love systems as they bring you into the video game-like world and takes you away from reality. As of chapter for it's been a good read with a likable male lead. Certainly a story for one to kick back on a Friday afternoon and enjoy.

I'll update more as I read more but so far, keep up the great work, writer!