From the first page, I was pulled in. Although slightly cliche with the dream sequence, it does a wonderful job of setting up the plot and made me question what would happen next. We as readers get a good idea that Dax may be more than what meets the eye. Another thing I liked in particular was how the author was able to describe things. The details are nicely done and adds a basic foundation to the characters and the world. The world building also seems interesting, I liked the concept of the nanites and the advanced world that Dax lives in. Dax and Fay also hit it off pretty well, so I'm curious to see if that's a possible shipping route, lol. The first few chapters are a slow build up, but there is lots of foreshadowing that tells you to just hang on for the ride. With that being said, there were some grammatical errors and sometimes the character interactions fall flat, but other than that, this story has a lot of potential and I look forward to reading more chapters from this awesome author. Keep up the good work, Choas! :)
I liked it for a while but he started staying completely on canon and it's really irritating I can't go through everything cause I have work but this is just my honest opinion
"Do you think you are able to take on the responsibility of taking care of a child? Not to mention that he is an Odd and is incapable of normally carrying out basic tasks like memorizing a theory and has no skills?"
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