Supernaturalville Book One: Tomb of the Haunted Bathroom

Wow, this story is amazing. I have only read a few chapters but I am definitely drawn to the story. My curiosity peek. I have a feeling that the story will definitely worth my time.

The translator f##king spoilt it, this would have been way better if the translation didn't have a lot of problems. Webnovel have to get better editors or translators.

Improved and less racist version of im really a super star featuring more understandable comedy and entertainment. A worthy spiritual succesor that seem to do everything right

Good author... if your novel only had as a reason as a hobby of yours, then without a doubt I would be encouraging you with this peculiar system that you present, after all you don't see many novels with that kind of premise.However, author..., when I saw you compete in the WSA 2022, then it is really questionable what theme you chose for your system, and not because it is a sin to write Simp stuff. If not to the type of audience that is going to be addressed, without further exaggeration, and many readers will not give your novel a chance, just because it has the title Simp.Then, in chapters 1 and 8, it is more than enough for several readers to abandon the novel, and even I felt uncomfortable in chapter 8. The reason was the interaction of Jack and Mary, their thoughts and actions do not match, not they are grounded and feel compelled for a later plot to follow. Then if I have to guess later Mary will regret it and then Jack will slap him with a reality that no longer needs her ("Sigh, that theme is already more than reused by several authors"), and with that I'm not saying that I forgive her; however, the previously established relationship is a headache for many readers.Now the question of characters we have a protagonist without self-esteem, with an inflated ego, Mary the typical naive heroine who later becomes the intriguing villain, Lucy the opportunistic girl, and in itself a large majority of readers will repudiate that type of background for your characters.Well author with that being said, unfortunately your premise is already doomed, as long as you can win, I just know that it will take extraordinary effort to make the Simp system enjoyable to read.Honestly, I wanted to rate this story 3 stars, but then I remembered that it's too early to give a review; however, I felt the need to write this, so in the form of support I decided to leave it 3.6, now I recommend reading it, well if you are a tolerant and calm person you may give it a try, but if you lack those two, then no, because you will take a bitter experience in these early chapters.As soon as all this is said, it's my personal opinion and if I'm wrong, just let me know in the answers section, I don't mean to offend anyone and all that, and good luck author with the competition.

other than the update stability and few minor grammatical errors, everything is fine. give it a try

<p>Alex looked at the beyond shocked Jeffrey. He almost burst out laughing as he saw his old butler's jaw about to reach the ground.</p>

"You know i have a buisness plan here that im sure it will have a profit"

"No you come on. You are being a feminist." He cut me off before I could complete my sentence. I rolled my eyes at him and he smiled at me charmingly.