Shadows of the Forgotten Disciple

"Help me, boy! Help! These people are crazy!!" Liu Jing pleaded. He was running as fast as he could but they just wouldn't let him go!

So what's wrong with taking the back streets?

Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play

So far, a promising read. The plot is intriguing, as well as concept. Text is understandable, but I would find myself rereading to get the gist. I suggest changing some sentence structure would do the trick. The narration could use some proofreading, since some transitions are rough.Overall, an interesting read. Keep up the good work.