Averengly intelligent mc that has all his action exalted as super smart by author. Lot of plot armour, everytimr mc is in need of something, magically appears 'quest' in which he gets everything he needs, standard idiotic selfishness (he is eternal and instead of using it to his advantage in sense of sharing some secrets secretly and making out of it in long run, he is too scared to give up something), do rme personally too boring
1) I absolutely love your story and you have my addiction burning.2) The only real constructive feedback that I have for you is that when you realise you are using some words too many times (ex. Recomposing or ingress) that you use the thesaurus to give you more options to expand your vocabulary. 3) Last thing, try to utilize words that aren't a mouthful for people to read. Using a softer approach for the sentence "his ingress to the royal capital was a grand spectical to witness." could be changed to "his entrence to the royal capital was a grand sight to see." Those are just some general statements I made up, but the second sentence is far easier for people to read vice the former.4) Again I love your story and your use of some interesting vocabulary and these are just some suggestions that could help amplify your writing. THANK YOU AND I HOPE YOU GIVE THIS A READ OVER :D
The only problem with this novel is the name of the mc is not Bob when it clearly should have been bob however apart from that this is my favourite new novel after manaless magician.
let me comment my tags for this book -humor-OP MC (he's not really that strong but...)-Master - Disciple relationship- Dangerous Girls- Another powerful and dangerous heroines - yandere master?- did I already mention how dangerous they are? haha well Goodluck MC I'll pray for your soul.
need more, more , give this a chance, you won't regret it. it will keep whoever is translating this novel alive and get good money because this is a good novel
Although this story might start slowly, the author wants to create a solid basis on which the plot will begin developing. Nevertheless, it's easy to follow, the main character is interesting, and the setting is full of diverse magical elements, races, and characters. Recommended.
Overall I’d say pretty good, one thing I appreciate is that the writing and grammar is readable without egregious mistakes. World setting and character design is fairly in depth and thorough although sometimes I find myself lost in terms of the different powers of stuff. Sure the author has clearly laid out the power structure but it’s easy to forget when switching between colors and tiers and the “well this person has a tier 3 core but their attacks are tier 4” idk maybe it’s just me but I find it confusing.A word of caution, this book is nauseatingly cliche, I won’t take away stars for it because it was warned at the beginning but sometimes I find myself just wanting to skip the long sections of cliche wholesomeness. Personally I’d like to see a bit darker of a setting with more conflict.
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