This is my entry for WSA 2022.
Contains some comedies and actions, but there are also serious scenes. And there are also parts that... Well...
Anyways! I hope you enjoy it. You can also vote, review, and add this work to the library if you don't mind.
Any support will be appreciated.
The initial chapters are crafted with expertise showing MC's ability to think carefully and smart, as he choses the other option instead of usual baby phase to be reborn. The pace is moderate and grammar is decent, talking about the theme/genre I seriously think author knows what they are doing with it! Good luck with WSA! [~aysel]
Been reading up to 8 chaps now. Quite a cool plot you got here. I like how you stick to your character designs.
Raymund only think of this as entertainment and nothing more. He's pretty laidback, not strictly driven to win the entire thing, definitely more concern about his chosen hero's 'performance', if you catch my drift. I don't particularly like him for the demeaning actions he dished to Elise, but it match with his background and current state of mind, I'll give you that.
And what I like about Elise is her believable, logical reaction to the happenings around. She wasn't an avid WN reader or RPG lovers who expect a reincarnation and casual 'you are the chosen one' situation. Hence why the need to scream and run as her initial instinct. Kudos to you.
Hopefully, you don't rush things and keep th character developments to happen slow.
I admittedly didn't get far. Mc just sort made me sick. Like people can enjoy villains but despise jerks. in the first ten chapters I just wanted him to lose. Only he'd not be the one to suffer for it. Mc pick up and draft young woman who's family burnt to death alive as his play peice and proceeds to be the most unthoughtful, sexist guilt tripping obnoxious condemnation of religion I can scarce imagine. He is on every level and idiot and terrible as a person and player about Elise and deeply unfunny. Team Rocket treats Pokemon better than he does Elise.
The book does a good job of intriguing the reader (Not choosing to be the protag? Interesting) The world is solid, and is described rather well. The character interactions are fun and witty, making this a fun read.
4 chapter in, and I see sign of ntr
Author intentionally create a lucky pervert moment between a potential harem member with a random guy, and the MC just treat everyone as an NPC, so he doesn't even bother about it.
The guy while trying to save the girl, somehow undress her pant, and panties, got to see it all in full glory, and the MC who act like a system of the girl just laugh.
This plot is completely unnecessary and to me, it a sign of the girl not gonna be in the mc harem.
It feel wrong, since in the synopsis give the impression that, the mc will build a harem, base on the girl that he reincarnated.
This is just 4 chapter in, so I won't consider it as much of a spoiler, just want to ask, if my gut is correct on this one?
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Contains some comedies and actions, but there are also serious scenes. And there are also parts that... Well...
Anyways! I hope you enjoy it. You can also vote, review, and add this work to the library if you don't mind.
Any support will be appreciated.
Raymund only think of this as entertainment and nothing more. He's pretty laidback, not strictly driven to win the entire thing, definitely more concern about his chosen hero's 'performance', if you catch my drift. I don't particularly like him for the demeaning actions he dished to Elise, but it match with his background and current state of mind, I'll give you that.
And what I like about Elise is her believable, logical reaction to the happenings around. She wasn't an avid WN reader or RPG lovers who expect a reincarnation and casual 'you are the chosen one' situation. Hence why the need to scream and run as her initial instinct. Kudos to you.
Hopefully, you don't rush things and keep th character developments to happen slow.
Keep up the good works, author :D
Author intentionally create a lucky pervert moment between a potential harem member with a random guy, and the MC just treat everyone as an NPC, so he doesn't even bother about it.
The guy while trying to save the girl, somehow undress her pant, and panties, got to see it all in full glory, and the MC who act like a system of the girl just laugh.
This plot is completely unnecessary and to me, it a sign of the girl not gonna be in the mc harem.
It feel wrong, since in the synopsis give the impression that, the mc will build a harem, base on the girl that he reincarnated.
This is just 4 chapter in, so I won't consider it as much of a spoiler, just want to ask, if my gut is correct on this one?