I logged back on and saw that my Eevee was the color of dry blood all except for it's black fur. Suddenly the game started glitching. I backed away from the screen but then, the Eevee came out too reality and said in a low voice, " I was waiting to long for you, now you join me!"
So far, a promising read. The plot is intriguing, as well as concept. Text is understandable, but I would find myself rereading to get the gist. I suggest changing some sentence structure would do the trick. The narration could use some proofreading, since some transitions are rough.Overall, an interesting read. Keep up the good work.
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