Totally amazing story. The background is on point. Characters are relatable. The story is well developed. Barely any errors insight. Very recommended read.
As I'm not that great in writing I will just say what I think is annoying for a reader. This (Mom:,Dad:) it's annoying, you can improve by getting rid of it and use something else that will help readers to identify who speaks at the moment. That's all, I'm looking forward for your improvement.
After reading the summary I was really excited about the premise of this novel and the possibilities the world and characters could have. That excitement stayed with me all the way through the first chapter, but by the time I finished the third chapter I was just pushing on with the hope that things would get better.What started to kill this novel for me was how the MC behaves in chapter 2 when he finds out he has been reborn. He's an old man who has mastered the use of Herbs/Medicine/whatever you want to call it and claims in his thoughts that no one knows more about the human body than him. With that being said you'd expect the MC to be intelligent and rational in his actions, but he's not. I mean, he was literally JUST born a few seconds ago and he's actively trying to talk and express his opinion. He even gets upset about that fact that his vocal cords won't allow him to do so.Even if we ignore the fact that he "knows more about the human body than any one else" and should KNOW that he won't be able to talk, he should also know how suspicious/bad it would look if a baby started to speak in complete and logical sentences after just being born (especially in what appears to be a medieval setting since he see's a man sitting at the side in armor). He then decides that since he can't talk like he wants to, he won't make any sound at all until he can, just because.It doesn't really get any better either. There is a little time skip and the MC is three years old and is speaking in complete and fluid sentences with logic and reasoning (despite no one teaching him how to do so) and isn't behaving like a child at all. He can also apparently read now because at the age of ONE he asked his mother if she could teach him how to read and write. While reading he unlocks a system that basically makes it so that he can create any skill just by thinking about it, which makes the rest of the story boring IMO.I tried to push on a bit and see if anything changed, but I just couldn't do it.
This is good story, but it is little bit too fast paced for me. I think the game introduction fell short, since the start was just too fast paced that in my opinion skipped a lot stuff, so early info dumps could have been avoided, by making MC do more ingame stuff which would have let us find out about the world with the eyes of MC, otherwise good story and I like the writing quality, but slow down the pace and it will be even better one.
Tiene buena trama y todo, pero es demasiado confuso y dificil de leer. Primero estaban contandole una historia y derrepente aparecio con una herida, luego de que estaban en Bravoos y despues en Poniente. Debería explicar mejor las cosas. Pero en si la tama hasta ahora es buena
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