Outhor here i wrote a chapter the problem is idk how to upload it i need a code or somthing this is my first novel btw pls comment if you know im noob in this
Up to date with the released chapters. The story is good but there have been more flaws as we keep on moving forward.1) Poor grammar, but readable.2) Too much information overload in some parts, but makes sense.3) Too much cringe lines. 4) MC thinking the subordinates can betray him and doesn't want to trust the system too much, when it is literally the system giving him everything.5) MC gets soul coins from killing other beings, but in recent chaps(specially in the forbidden areas part), he gets no soul coins from killing so many powerful cultivators.6) MC taking risks for no reason, like he accompanied Isadora to unknown regions when he was just at Golden Core, then goes on to fight Core Formation Tree God when there was risk of failure. Why the heck would the author make MC go out when he doesn't have information on those parts. He could just wait and upgrade his strength and slowly scout out the regions through his subordinates.It is readable, but there are many things that could be improved.
He narrowly managed to tilt his head to the side, dodging the fist. He jumped back and dodged another fist from the giant zombie. He didn't attack at all during the next few seconds, and just watched the giant zombies movements closely.
"Sure you were! As if you would ever do something like that" Jaeden said sarcastically. "If you don't want to tell us, then don't bother making up stories"
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