Primordial Serpent (Stopped)

I'm in chapter 14 right now, and the story is quite good for a 15 year old like you(Cough,I'm 16 years old this year don't mind me) to write this humorous story. I will look forward of how the story will goes. Keep up the good work

What can I say I'm a sucker for OP creature OC

Keep up the good update schedule
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Of course I will give my own book 5 stars I am biased so it is only natural

Hey... Like your story... it's a good read...
Just think you need to add more details about the world.
I start to crave it by the third chapter, and without it I don't really understand the explanations about the 'old monkey'.
Even a few sentences in the second chapter about 'this world... is this...'
a lot less direct then what I just wrote, but keep going!
without the world the details don't mean as much...
if I knew where the 'old monkey' was from, even a few words after the word monkey, I would understand where they met, and know more about the story...

Obviously wish that the chapters coming out would be longer and have more in them, but overall it's a pretty good story so far. keep it going

Okay, so I don't look bias. Haven't begun my reading but I like the synopsis. So I'm gonna give a review first then after reading Or during reading, give another one.

Keep it up

34 chapter and i can't stop reading:) very good(little grammar mistakes but easily readable) 140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140(

A new novel - Eastern fantasy. There are pluses, there are minuses. This is an honest review.

The quality of the text block, you can give 5 stars, is easy to read, almost everything is clear. Interestingly written, even fascinating.

Updates are ongoing, 2-3 chapters sometimes. If the author manages to maintain this pace for 2-3 months, then he deserves praise. While he succeeds. Bravo! 5 stars.

The development of history - is dynamic, but sometimes there are jumps from one topic to another IMHO of course, 5 stars

But the character’s character is not clearly spelled out, it is not clear what his character traits, what emotions, who he is at all, what kind of person he is, what he lives with? 4 stars.

The world - it is not described in detail, at first you can’t understand where the actions take place, in what time, era, how this world looks like? What is special about it? But, somewhere in the middle of the 15-20th chapter, the world is partially clarified, simply by pointing to oriental fiction. Such worlds have already been described in a dozen novels of a similar genre. Therefore, also 3 stars.

Plus the novel, reading it is fascinating, sometimes intriguing, although sometimes reading the beginning, the end can be predicted.

The quality of writing is good. There are some original points, finds.

Cons - The novel is replete with cliches inherent in the stories of this genre. Originality, thoughts are not always shown, there are compilation of plots.

In general, I liked the novel, I read it regularly, included it in my library. If you have nothing to read, and you like the genre of oriental fiction, not too fans, then a very good novel to read.

Thanks to the author for his work! Much has been written, and with a good text block, updates are regular without interruptions, it costs a lot. Really cool!

respectfully