Player [GirlxGirl]

dark ending...poorly written as it appears to have had plot and character development all over the map.  Author jumps in to explain story instead of letting the story follow a course and develop on it's own.

This story had me so caught up. The strength the characters showed me from the beginning. I could not put it down. I finished in just a few hours and even ignored the outside world.  

It was a large creature. Mao Lu had never seen anything like it before. A thick mist was emanating off of it, the mist wasn't made of water vapour but something surreal and toxic and grey, it made all the essences around it shrivel up, rot and fade away. Everything it touched was simply decaying. Its entire body was covered in thick mist, the only definite features on it were its red piercing eyes and sharp green teeth that secreted a strange pink fluid. This fluid dripped on the floor and made the rotting spread.