Hi there! Thank you for even making it this far! This is my attempt at a holistic breakdown of this work, but please keep in mind that it is my first time writing a story of this genre.
TLDR: Not a typical OP ML who levels up in a game. More of the journey (both mental and in-game) of a top eSports player. Inspired by actual eSports players and discusses their struggles, games, and career.
Writing Quality: Clear and understandable writing with minimal grammatical errors. Generally reread and edited at least twice before publishing. I personally pride myself on vivid descriptions of scenery and emotion and try to add small Easter eggs or foreshadowing, but it might read a bit wordier than most works of this genre.
Stability of Updates: Pushing for an update at least once every two days. I am a current student, so please excuse me if I disappear for a few days. That being said, if you vote and comment, chances of me updating or even giving a mass release are very high :3
Story Development: Will be a moderately paced story, roughly divided into four quarters that mirror the ML's place in life: 1. Casual Play 2. Rise of eSports 3. Height of eSports Career 4. Forced towards Retirement/New Commercialization Trends *A lot of the plot drivers will be personal growth, both career-wise and interpersonal relationship-wise, so do not head into this story expecting a straight leveling up story.*
Character Design: Very realistic character designs, with each person complete with their own strengths and flaws. More importantly, there will be character growth and development.
World Background: Realistic setting that mirrors the history of eSports. The game, Kings of Valor, is loosely based on popular MOBAs such as League of Legends, except with different names, champions, and champion skills. (And yes I play League a lot ;-; Tbh wayyy more than I should for my own good)
Warnings: Not the typical videogame story that focused on the game itself or the somehow OP ML but instead centers around character development, gamers' relationships to family and friends, societal expectations, and choosing between dreams and reality.
Disclaimer: All coincidences with real life names and events are not intentional and are not intended to offend anyone.
Enjoy! To see if people actually read through these reviews...if you play League, attach a GIF of your main! Also, if you wanna support me through Ko-Fi for the new Diana Ultimate skin, I swear I'll update ;-;
Well, I don't know if there are a lot of stories about Esports, and to be honest what I usualy read that has anything to do with gaming are stories like Shield hero or overlord that has rpg elements.
So this is my first time reading something like this, and truth be told I loved it, for how original and difrent it is!
Well review time!
First the setting, really original it takes, for me the hat with how difrent it is, and how it aproaches the concept where usualy it's "you died, you go to the world of the game" or "life is bad, you go to the world of the game" but we don't get that here, this is about a gamer, that gets a second chance to either change his life or do it all again so he can finally become the best!
This brings us to the MC, Yu Pengaki, and to be honest in the first few chapters, I felt for him and man it was too relatable, and after reading all the chapters, I can't wait to see what will happen next!
Now the writting it's really good, no mistakes whatsoever, the way everything is described is really well done, with props to the moments where Yu is playing, reminds me of my days playing league.
Now to warp it all up, you can see that the author has put a lot of love and effort into this story and we can see his love for these type of games! So to everyone that loves video games like League of Legends or Dota, give this a go you won't regret it!
As for me I will keep a close look on this one here!
P.S: If this all sounds too vague it's on purpose as I want you to read this story.
P.P.S: And now thanks to it, I also want to play Legue again...
Suggestion: Make sure to flesh out who teleported him back in time later on. You could introduce a bit of fantasy or magic realism/sci fi into the novel. It would help your novel be way more compelling than all the stories in where this happens for no reason.
Please try to think of an overarching plot that includes this.
Overall 5/5 for now. enough said, added to library.
Definite 5 stars, I knew I struggled and still am with writing, but for your first time, it blew me away. Crisp and direct, which is a major downfall of mine, I find this utterly fascinating to read. Spot in my library for sure !
MC shows character in every nuance of his actions, and I find it appealing to spectate him.
Storyline may seem cliche, but to future readers, do not try to skip over it without reading first. It is a polished gem.
World background was given, which is plenty for now. Reminds me slightly of King’s Avatar tho.
All in all, infatuated and doubly impressed ! Kudos to you author, and I hope you continue writing with fervor !
What do you think?
The guy tried nine times, each time he had a full year to prepare, Would going back in time really change anything?
He may be able to win the first time because he knows the competitions game better than they know themselves, assuming he's smart enough to remember, but after that?
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TLDR: Not a typical OP ML who levels up in a game. More of the journey (both mental and in-game) of a top eSports player. Inspired by actual eSports players and discusses their struggles, games, and career.
Writing Quality: Clear and understandable writing with minimal grammatical errors. Generally reread and edited at least twice before publishing. I personally pride myself on vivid descriptions of scenery and emotion and try to add small Easter eggs or foreshadowing, but it might read a bit wordier than most works of this genre.
Stability of Updates: Pushing for an update at least once every two days. I am a current student, so please excuse me if I disappear for a few days. That being said, if you vote and comment, chances of me updating or even giving a mass release are very high :3
Story Development: Will be a moderately paced story, roughly divided into four quarters that mirror the ML's place in life: 1. Casual Play 2. Rise of eSports 3. Height of eSports Career 4. Forced towards Retirement/New Commercialization Trends *A lot of the plot drivers will be personal growth, both career-wise and interpersonal relationship-wise, so do not head into this story expecting a straight leveling up story.*
Character Design: Very realistic character designs, with each person complete with their own strengths and flaws. More importantly, there will be character growth and development.
World Background: Realistic setting that mirrors the history of eSports. The game, Kings of Valor, is loosely based on popular MOBAs such as League of Legends, except with different names, champions, and champion skills. (And yes I play League a lot ;-; Tbh wayyy more than I should for my own good)
Warnings: Not the typical videogame story that focused on the game itself or the somehow OP ML but instead centers around character development, gamers' relationships to family and friends, societal expectations, and choosing between dreams and reality.
Disclaimer: All coincidences with real life names and events are not intentional and are not intended to offend anyone.
Enjoy! To see if people actually read through these reviews...if you play League, attach a GIF of your main! Also, if you wanna support me through Ko-Fi for the new Diana Ultimate skin, I swear I'll update ;-;
So this is my first time reading something like this, and truth be told I loved it, for how original and difrent it is!
Well review time!
First the setting, really original it takes, for me the hat with how difrent it is, and how it aproaches the concept where usualy it's "you died, you go to the world of the game" or "life is bad, you go to the world of the game" but we don't get that here, this is about a gamer, that gets a second chance to either change his life or do it all again so he can finally become the best!
This brings us to the MC, Yu Pengaki, and to be honest in the first few chapters, I felt for him and man it was too relatable, and after reading all the chapters, I can't wait to see what will happen next!
Now the writting it's really good, no mistakes whatsoever, the way everything is described is really well done, with props to the moments where Yu is playing, reminds me of my days playing league.
Now to warp it all up, you can see that the author has put a lot of love and effort into this story and we can see his love for these type of games! So to everyone that loves video games like League of Legends or Dota, give this a go you won't regret it!
As for me I will keep a close look on this one here!
P.S: If this all sounds too vague it's on purpose as I want you to read this story.
P.P.S: And now thanks to it, I also want to play Legue again...
Suggestion: Make sure to flesh out who teleported him back in time later on. You could introduce a bit of fantasy or magic realism/sci fi into the novel. It would help your novel be way more compelling than all the stories in where this happens for no reason.
Please try to think of an overarching plot that includes this.
Overall 5/5 for now. enough said, added to library.
MC shows character in every nuance of his actions, and I find it appealing to spectate him.
Storyline may seem cliche, but to future readers, do not try to skip over it without reading first. It is a polished gem.
World background was given, which is plenty for now. Reminds me slightly of King’s Avatar tho.
All in all, infatuated and doubly impressed ! Kudos to you author, and I hope you continue writing with fervor !
The guy tried nine times, each time he had a full year to prepare, Would going back in time really change anything?
He may be able to win the first time because he knows the competitions game better than they know themselves, assuming he's smart enough to remember, but after that?
You're doing well though! Carry on