After reading the first 15 chapters it is becoming more and more painful to read this sloppy machine translated novel with minimal editing I hope that the quality will improve in the future but I see that as unlikely.
an overall wholesome cultivation novel with good plot and character design . it has a good chance to continue forward and be famous but wonder why author himself doesn't want to continue it and taking a break instead
Too early to give it a real review, but it gets 5 stars for being in the evil protagonist tag with my novel Devil's Rise. Keep up the good work new author.
Your progression and story telling is way to rushed and crude.the way you started the story was nice but your follow through doesn't feel worth it at all....
Honestly, writing is ok. A few grammatical errors but nothing that stops you from reading fluently. The main problem is that his system doesn’t really do system things, the system is not really explored or talked about, the only thing we know is that it fixes his posture when working out or shooting, I wish the system would get an upgrade or something, he has his system and has played five seasons but still loses to the well know centers just for plot, his effort does not match his win rate, five seasons and bro still feels mediocre. I get the whole mature thing with top lives but bro is too zen, talk about his daily life with actual detail, basketball players and fans talk a lot online add a story on that too, show interactions with other players instead of a line just saying "they talked” actually show the talking and write about some actual behind the scenes. Also bro has two kids and a wife, it’s like they don’t do stuff together, they feel like character fillers. I have not seen any more improvements from mc, especially coming from a guy with 2 lives and even has a system, most importantly he has played 5+ seasons and not much to talk about … especially for a guy with a system.
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