So far from what I have read up to chapter 49, this story is above average. The mc is not perfect nor allowed his past problems to allow him to be evil. He is a flawed character, to which in life is more realistic than most stories i have read on here. I think being able to relate to a mc actions in a story is very impressive compared to most of the stories which are slanted in one way or the other to a very bad degree.
The only small problem I have seen thus far is the author has a small problem with the "him" "her" flip flop sometimes. the author seems to have fixed most of it as of chapter 49.
Personally for me it is a near perfect novel. Reasons are
1. The smoothness of story progression
2. Characters - very realistic and well thought
3. Action scenes are nicely done
4. There is a strong sense of purpose in whatever actions the protagonist and side characters perform
SPOILER BELOW
For the author - I understand why the three energies can’t mix and fuse but desmond being so overwhelmingly talented can’t he use mana as the primary energy, ki or aura for body strengthing and lastly arcanum for the mind/soul.
Please think about it dear author, once again absolutely love your work
I like the world so far as though it contains a few cliche elements it is combined in a way and with new ideas that make for an interesting setting and is probably the novel's strongest point.
The characters so far have been pretty interesting though outside of a few core characters that are pretty interesting the side characters could be helped by being more distinct.
So far the story is good. I wouldn't say amazing as hasn't gone anywhere deep so far, but good enough to keep me interested in how it will continue with some romance and actions. I would like to get some more intrigue and discovery related to MC, his ancestor etc blended with some story progression to elevate the story to a higher level.
Now as for the only major downside is the writing quality. I suspect this is a translation rather than original work in English and pronouns are just an absolute mess. No he just him/her get messed up, but even those get messed up with I not infrequently which is a whole other level beyond even what I'm used to from rushed translations. It is even to the point where it can be distracting as I have to re-read paragraphs to figure out which pronouns were meant to be used to understand what the paragraph was supposed to mean.
Come and judge me those authors who have not given themselves 5 stars, with that challenge issued; I would like to say that I really enjoy writing this novel so I hope that many people enjoy reading it.
I am a novice writer so there are still things to improve, any comments will be appreciated.
honestly this novel so far has been great Its actually really a fresh story with an interesting universe I just hope the other can keep moving forward with it I'm positive it will eventually grow in popularity so keep it up author
Es una buena novela pero no la promocionaste bien.
Deberias cambiar la portada.
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Popular Reviews
The only small problem I have seen thus far is the author has a small problem with the "him" "her" flip flop sometimes. the author seems to have fixed most of it as of chapter 49.
1. The smoothness of story progression
2. Characters - very realistic and well thought
3. Action scenes are nicely done
4. There is a strong sense of purpose in whatever actions the protagonist and side characters perform
SPOILER BELOW
For the author - I understand why the three energies can’t mix and fuse but desmond being so overwhelmingly talented can’t he use mana as the primary energy, ki or aura for body strengthing and lastly arcanum for the mind/soul.
Please think about it dear author, once again absolutely love your work
The characters so far have been pretty interesting though outside of a few core characters that are pretty interesting the side characters could be helped by being more distinct.
So far the story is good. I wouldn't say amazing as hasn't gone anywhere deep so far, but good enough to keep me interested in how it will continue with some romance and actions. I would like to get some more intrigue and discovery related to MC, his ancestor etc blended with some story progression to elevate the story to a higher level.
Now as for the only major downside is the writing quality. I suspect this is a translation rather than original work in English and pronouns are just an absolute mess. No he just him/her get messed up, but even those get messed up with I not infrequently which is a whole other level beyond even what I'm used to from rushed translations. It is even to the point where it can be distracting as I have to re-read paragraphs to figure out which pronouns were meant to be used to understand what the paragraph was supposed to mean.
I am a novice writer so there are still things to improve, any comments will be appreciated.
Deberias cambiar la portada.
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