After the samurai drew their swords to attack Star, the young boy leaped up into the air. Doing this made him dodge their attacks that would have killed him easily. "Fools!" Star shouted, aiming a well-aimed punch at one of the samurai. The punch had knocked away the samurai, but one of the other samurai had thrust his sword forward, catching Star's arm. Star immediately moved his arm away to only have a cut and not a gash in his arm. "What to tell me why the military unit is trying to gut me like a fish?" His voice showed his genuine confusion and the samurai gazed at Star in shock.
افضل عمل اشوفه في حياتي.........ببسشب للخيل أحبه بنات به باك يا ب لك لك بالطبع لك لك إن س يا سبب تم يا سبب يا لك سن تم يا بنك يا سبب يا لك لك لك لك يكذب يا لك ثم لك يكذب يا سبب يا سبب يا سبب يا بحسابك ذلك يطرد سم لك ي بكل شمسية يحبني عملاق لا يا
I know this question is dumb but Why would he need to grow as a person when 'he's' a dungeon core? It's like asking a donkey to become a better lion😅. Also that paragraph that supposed to be hyping the story always crack me up, I mean "Evil gods introduced new species that have the ability to change the world! will the so called righteous god allow? or nah?" or something so obvious like this🤣
So then, let's begin with my own EXTREMELY OBJECTIVE analysis.Objectively speaking, my book is, of course, the best. No one will ever write a better one. Clear as day.Jokes aside, here's my assessment:Characters:Not bad, but far from good enough. The emotions are somewhat lacking, and a unique way of speaking would improve them.On the positive side, they have their own personalities and don’t just revolve around the MC.Worldbuilding:I’m proud of this. It becomes clearer as the story progresses—maybe in Volume 2 or 3. But I’ve put an incredible amount of effort into it.Story:It’s not bad, but it could have been developed a bit more.Overall, I think I’ve done a good job, but not a great one.There’s still a lot of room for improvement.By the way, it’s a rather slow-paced novel.If you have any questions, feel free to reach out to me!
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