I’m fully aware that as the story only has 18 reviews as of now, I’m bombing the review score. But at the same time, this story deserves nowhere near as much support as it seems to be getting. The concept is great and I love it, but the execution the author used is terrible. And yes, it’s the author’s first time writing but... that’s not an excuse to just ignore what readers are trying to say. In fact. The author is blatantly disregarding all the comments about the typos and spelling mistakes, or the story’s absolutely terrible grammar. Which, by the way, the story is littered with. Sorry, but I can’t support this train wreck. But here’s a promise, I’ll come back and fully support the novel of the author gets the story back together. Likely quite a few chapters need fully rewriting to make the grammar readable but trust me author... it’s well worth the cost. Props to the author for choosing to write, though.
I really liked the gaming system and the characters who surprisely got me interested and involved even if it is not my favorite genre! The author’s grammar and descriptions are very cured so I totally suggest It to everyone and not just readers interested in gaming!
This is really good and well written. This gives the same vibes as the original and the MC is similar to Fang Yuan but still has his own uniqueness. I really like the fact that he has better luck than Fang Yuan who had to go against the world which is typical for eastern fics. Over all I enjoyed this and hope you keep it up.
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I never try to write anything like this but for this story, I have to. My first thought was how far it could move me. When I read the first chapter, I just blinked and nodded. Alright. Not that bad. But when I finished the chapter Neo-Genesis. I wept tears. Yes, this man did cry. I was surprised that the author has a way to tell the story. If this novel were a man, he would have a high IQ and EQ because the storyteller is smart and smart to move this reader to feel like the characters. I like most of everything, plot, characters, the warmth of this family, and some little hints that the author already put in at the beginning. What I like the most is ‘less is more.’ The narration is not overdramatic. The author just tells his story and uses surrounding tools to show details which is simple but ‘deep’. Great job. Undisclosure is one of a few fictions I read on my smartphone and did not check how long the chapter is. I read it smoothly. There are some holes, for example, POV, the unnatural conversation. Or the writing of some scenes is not powerful enough to build emotions. But it’s just a little thing that I can overlook. I recommend it. This story should deserve more views.
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