NBA Error

Honestly, writing is ok. A few grammatical errors but nothing that stops you from reading fluently. The main problem is that his system doesn’t really do system things, the system is not really explored or talked about, the only thing we know is that it fixes his posture when working out or shooting, I wish the system would get an upgrade or something, he has his system and has played five seasons but still loses to the well know centers just for plot, his effort does not match his win rate, five seasons and bro still feels mediocre. I get the whole mature thing with top lives but bro is too zen, talk about his daily life with actual detail, basketball players and fans talk a lot online add a story on that too, show interactions with other players instead of a line just saying "they talked” actually show the talking and write about some actual behind the scenes. Also bro has two kids and a wife, it’s like they don’t do stuff together, they feel like character fillers. I have not seen any more improvements from mc, especially coming from a guy with 2 lives and even has a system, most importantly he has played 5+ seasons and not much to talk about … especially for a guy with a system.

Balanced story with interesting developments

Best story I've ever read on this app. An actual realistic ish main character, who doesn't through the magic of a system turn into michael jordan in his rookie year. The main character, Hector actually fails and learns which is refreshing.

Nice stuff

Great just great

I was expecting him to be good by the second season but no. Having a system apparently makes you double your efforts while gaining nothing. This story would've been better without the system. Anyway good luck with the story.

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This is a really good sports novel. The pacing is spot on as the first few season is character development.