My Ship Is A Pervert

Indian mythology; consider me in. Even I would like to know how Vishnu ends up being the God of ailmentation. One of the most worshiped and revered god.

There's hardly a story worth reading about 12 chapters in and there's no character or world development just horrendous word dumps on character gameplay elements that aren't even introduced well; the typical game breaking VR template with a kid who finds a magical ring that lets him hack into the game that his daddy wouldn't buy him and equip things IRL to flex in front of his classmates about how strong he is and not to judge a book by its cover. Combat is essentially my attributes were better> (system log exp rewards)Maybe next life you rabbits will see Mt Tai!

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Read until chapter 55, nothing really happens. Auther just keeps on rambling about the future and events that play no significance to the current events. MC is your typical useless luck struck plot armor MC. Outside of making money through the stock market, which he pawned of to one of the female characters, he really doesn’t do anything important. The flow of the story is on the slow side and the events are so random that it ruins the reading experience. For the Auther. Don’t explain so much useless information. Show your story don’t tell. Show the MC having a meeting and telling each individual their goal and when they need to accomplish said goal by. In other words, you’re trying to make your MC this great leader without them showing any leadership skills. Don’t tell us why a character is going to be important or how they’re related to the MC, show us through their interactions with the MC. Example, when you had the two neighbors scene talking to his parents, don’t explain who they are. Instead just leave them until they show up in the main plot of the story. Then inform the readers using the interaction between the MC and the other characters. That’s all I’ve got for you. In summary it’s not a bad story, the author just needs to learn how to write better. An editor would help but I’m aware of how expensive that can get.

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