My Multiverse Trip

Usually, I like to read power fantasies but this is a weak mc disguised as an  OP power fantasy mc. He literally has master grade occulmancy but literally EVERONE who is not dumbledore and snape and rando's can read his mind. Like WHY? 1/10

The story is interesting and has good potential at the beginning.
The idea of bringing the farm into another world system is really good.
But I'm already coming to a major problem, it's unreadable (there's a wall of text in the chapters, no capitalization for the beginning of some sentences, punctuation is sometimes non-existent, chapter names sometimes mean nothing).

Now concerning the story itself it started slowly and only became really interesting after about 20 chapters, which is regrettable, but it is better to build a story with a good basis.
Some things about the story are not bad, but what bothers me is the Mc who is quite stupid, clear and simple, he has so many resources but doesn't even use a fraction of them and is too lazy to train even when he can make his shadows train for him, he still doesn't take it seriously and gets beaten by beginners who are even later, he decimates more than 60 dead eaters and kills them all and that's before he gets a good training and now in the 2nd world, he chose the twilight and honestly; it's probably the worst decision the author could have made, he's flinching at all the vampire eyes, which is a serious problem for a world that's not one of the most gory and terrifying.

Overall, an average novel that needs a publisher quickly, but I think it has good potential, the author is also very active with more than 60 chapters in 4 days.

Ps: I read the synopsis well so I know the author is a beginner and this novel is a bit of a draft but to improve it, you have to give constructive criticism.

Bro did you ever imagine if hulk thinks that by fighting in hilk form is too easy and so he starts fighting as Bruce banner.
Your novel seems same bro you make mc op but when fighting he didn't even come in middle of the chart. He don't use his powers and don't use his weapons fights with hands and you say that there is no need an Excalibur for gobli. But you still use hands when fighting high level monsters and say that they can one hit ko mc.
Are you really kidding me bbro...,............

The only good thing about this novel is the number of chapters and update frequency. Thats probably the only reason ppl are reading it.
Now onto the story review,the mc is a guy that has a multiverse system that has a qq farm from the novel as well as the shadow hack.What does he do with his cheats? Nothing he doesn absolutely nothing,im not kidding when i say nothing,its not like those mc that dont abuse their system,the mc literally does nothing with his cheat.He doesnt get strong at all in the first 100 chapters which is the harry potter world.What he does do is basically suck hp's dick and his friends all story long.Whatever he worked hard to get,guess what ? He becomes a tooth fairy and gets it for everyone with a soul in the story.He is basically the cheat for the hp world for everyone.Guess since he doesnt abuse it for himself,he might as well let others abuse it for themselves right?

Now that if that isnt infuriating then we get the whole lets reveal everything to everyone trope,yeah he shows everyone what makes him special etc,why bother with the mind arts if youre gonna reveal everything lol We spend 100 chapters of him basically being the same as any other character in hp probably even worst,he isnt smart,he isnt talented he has a lot of problems but his system can fix it but he doesnt do so heh.

Now we have the next world,a world with vampires and werewolf in it.Guess what he does in such a dangerous world where he can be killed in a moment's notice? He doesnt get supernatural powers from his system oh no he doesnt capitalize on it at all.He chooses to stay human and play mysterious only to almost die from a accident. Pathetic,did i mention he is scared of needles too?

Overall this novel has a useless mc that is a doormat for every single character in every world,probably gonna be a doormat for the characters in the next world too.He is already trying to abuse his system so his vampire crush's problem could be fix rofl.

Oh my god 98 chapters a week and rank 3 as of this moment I am a literal god lol the chapters I'm pushing out per day are just insane whoscompetin

Hey man I'm popping out over 10 chapters a day so far I think I'm doing pretty good for my first time writing a novel look at me now mom lol

I'm sorry but I just can't read this.....he is such a coward. And don't even get me started on how basically everyone can read his fucking thoughts even though his a master of occumency. Like what the ****, It's not even funny anymore it's just plain stupid.

Writing Quality: 4/5
Stability of Updates: 4/5
Story Development: 3/5
Character Design: 1/5
World Background: 4/5

This story is one of better written fanfics on this site and the system is easily understandable yet quite advanced compared to others while the storyline feels a little too much of a copy paste of original so far it's good
The one and only problem for the story is a massive one, the mc is absolute trash, there's no redeeming qualities from him so far at ch34
I really want to continue reading this but I can't, it's too frustrating seeing our mc having such a massive amount of resources available to him yet he acts like a fucking retard and fucks around and almost gets himself killed, let me guess, he'll look right into the basilisk eyes later just for the lols or something, that's how retarded he is, he threw a fucking rock cake on a troll and then proceeded to try to dodge the swings instead of you know actually using fucking magic