Read what was free for a reference point(to few chapters to be charging in my opinion but do things your way). Grammar needs a lot of work. Some sentences left me lost at what was happening. Also study up on when and where to use commas. The world building is ok but it’s lacking in detials. What world is he on, where is his home world, what is the geography of the city and area he is in? The systems also doesn’t seem to be the same across the board. Lvl doesnt mean much if the class is weak. Also didn’t talk about monsters and their systems or growth patterns. You also wrote about realms but not in any detail so we can have an idea what it means. Getting strong from eating what you kill is used a lot lately and there is no real unique attention grabber for me. Update stability is also not where I would hope for a story that is charging. Hope you can rework the story and edit it. Good luck
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