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Good start, good premise. The only problem is that your usage of the past tense is wrong, and i think you have this misconception that whenever something is in 3rd person perspective, everything will be written in past tense. That is not entirely correct. Anyway, i love the character development and the world building. Perhaps, spice up the story with some unexpected events.Good luck!

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So overall it’ a good and interesting book. No major grammar errors or any major mistakes.However, I started noticing some flaws and decided to drop around ch. 48. Here is my reasoning:I get a feeling that the writing is a little shallow. The mc encounters some problem that isn’t explained too much, then immediately god-snaps and fixes whatever it is. For example, building and creating all of his inventions. Very few people know the exact compositions of materials. Going further, very few people have enough expertise in a field to recreate even one of the varied things the mc is making. How can a person be able to make say different shampoos, which the author probably just googled a basic recipe, and then go ahead and start making concrete and buildings. Making a building is super complicated even if you are able to get rid of the manpower issue with magic. All of the sudden inventions just start to become unreal and unimaginable for the mc to come up with them. Especially if there were previous reincarnator. How the h*ll is the mc the first to come up with the types of food he is. Add onto that the cleaning supplies as well. The first thing on a reincarnators to do list would have been these exact things so why is the mc the first. I mean, the previous reincarnator was a WOMAN. Do u expect a WOMAN from the modern world to go one day without at least trying to make some kind of shampoo with magic. It’s jus bullshut. Based on everything that is happening I can already know what is going to happen in the locked chapters just by their names. My real problem is there is no depth and realness to the other world. The only real worldbuilding we get is medieval magic sword world with demons. NOTHING ELSE. The food of the world isn’t described, everything is worse than what the mc can bring to the table. Author, u do realize that America didn’t make all the types of food in the world right. It just has a bunch of the worlds food available. That means that there is different food everywhere. In this other world, all u could bear to describe of their food was the bad jerky that the knights had. Otherwise all u did was say that the mcs food was the best. That’s all. I mean, come on. If a place was able to make chocolate and tea, two things that take complex actions and recipes to make, u expect me to believe they can’t make some other food like fried food. U also realize that fried food isn’t the best food in the world right?Oh well I’ll stop ranting. It was an ok story but if u want a deep and interesting story, don’t get ur hopes up for this story. Its a watered down version of Wise Man’s Grandson and other similar isekai stories. I was expecting a more mysterious story due to the synopsis but all it is is the mc and the reincarnation of his wife, i.e. the princess, being so blind that they don’t recognize each other the entire time even though the author seems to make a point of when they should recognize each other.

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Dr. Sapphiran was an intellect of the highest order. With a seat on the central cortex, he was a man of great importance. He had achieved many things in his life, and thus was given the leadership position of a secret project known only by those on the blue blood council and the golden king himself

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Luffy and Robin stayed with his crew the entire night, following them as they made their way through the desert on duck back. It was finally daybreak and the capital city of Alabasta, Alubarna was finally in sight. As they were approaching the capital Luffy saw every member of his crew put on matching robes covering their entire body.

"Student, what is that?!" Zhang Liu, of course, had knowledge of what the supposed student was wearing while hiding behind everyone. "Remove it, right now! Let me see your face!"