Simple is better! Do not use big words and verbs in tenses that don't make sense! Even a comma can stop the flow of the story, and here it does. Please stop using big words just to show your vocabulary! It makes the story so hard to read. Cut the words that are put there to fill the page. It is a wonderful story with amazing potential but the writer has to realize that a phrase has rhythm. You block that rhythm with complicated words, commas that are missplaced or verbs in tenses that make no sense. A story is like a river. It has parts where it rages - that is where the reader gets to read faster, action is at the peak and you just want to know more! At the same time the river has parts where it is calm. Here the reader feels like wrapped in a cocoon of fluffy words. The immersion in the story happens here because this leads to the action! so please try harder.
Dear fellow readers, this is not a spoiler I repeat, this is not a spoiler because it is seen in the 1st chapter that this is a SYSTEM NOVEL!!!! Yeah u heard it right , and not just any system novel but to upgrade the level of low grade martial world as the main importance.
this novel is mid asf. cliche story, the side characters doesn't have a brain. and the conversations between characters are very cringy and unhumanlike, and unnatural, i don't get how you don't see that something is strange with the conversations, i mean you're a human, right? or maybe you never talked to someone in your life? it's just straight up stupid, it's like the conversations were written by 9 yo. the conversations are so bad, it felt strange, lifeless and bland. well, i just read all the free chaps, maybe it'll get better.
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The only reason you book isn't popular is because webnovel doesn't reward slow progression stories. I read only a few chapters and I already knew this book should warrant a place in the power ranking. Author is wasting his talent here. When you finish the book, please send it to a publisher. I would order the book online if this ever happens.
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