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50 plus chap and the author is still torturing the mc, one of the most boring novels so far. I'm skipping some and see if it changes, but so far, it's trash

Wonderful novel, easily read 4 chapters at once! The author is a great talent !!! I will read more with interest! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Also here because of the old version and I really hope that it works out this time.Also I must praise Author Truedawn for the amazing picture of the Novel.

You have a plot and direction for your story, author. I salute you for that. You also have a good grasp of how to play with your MC's emotions and ideas. The story is engaging. Your grammar still has room for improvement but you don't have to worry much about it because your sentences flow naturally and it's still easy to follow. I think what you should prioritize for now is the stability of updates and more on world background. Also, work on the punctuations and capitalization. Also break down your paragraphs into more paragraphs. I suggest you always leave the quoted conversations as a line/paragraph of itself. In other words, work on making your paragraphs easier on the eyes. Honestly, some chapters look more like a wall of text to me. And I hate to say this, but many readers dislike wall of texts. XDUhh, no worries. This is all just the technical side. When it comes to content, you're already on the right direction. :-)

so boring.  40% of the free chapters are wasted on unnecesary boring info dump. yapping fest in short. the thing is, it's bad. imagine using the supposed to be free chapters to make it look interesting as a bunch of info dum for unnecesary boring yapping. there's also the dumb function where the players cant deal dmg(the author is just bad enough to the point that he doesnt wanna write players in action) its just bad

"Baiklah, sepertinya kami harus sedikit memaksa." mereka mulai berjalan mendekatinya. Dengan cepat Yoona menutup payungnya dan memegangnya dengan erat. Ia diam sejenak, seperti sedang menunggu reaksi dari mereka, namun ketika sebuah tangan hendak menyentuhnya, seperti kilat ia menepis tangan itu dengan payungnya. Pria yang lain tersentak melihat kecepatan gerakannya dan mulai terlihat serius.