Live At The Murder Scene

Writing needs improvement especially in the grammar area but other than that this story is amazing on its own. The idea is very interesting and each chapter keeps you going. I hardly notice the mistakes because I enjoyed reading this. Hope you don't drop!

This book was HORRIBLE because the execution was absoulute garbage and one of the main reasons I hate thi story is that he squanders his parents wealth not his own like a novel that has a somewhat similar premise to this but over 100 x better is "losing money to be a tycoon" because HE SPENDS HIS OWN MONEY (And systems but we dont count that)

Amazing novel. Easily better than most translated novels of this genre. It's pretty realistic as well, there are no villains calling MC a "thrash" at every corner and stuff like that. Romance is great, characters are great, both female and male lead. One advice I would give to the author is to actually make this novel short so he could actually finish it. There is no need for 3000 chapters like some translated novels have.

Very nice chapter and I will continue to strive for more so please publish another onedjisussososishshxhhshshdhdjsjsjhsbsbshshshgsdgghgfghshhshshd

i just want start that i have no idea about stability of updates(i just idk)and the writing quality is ok so {three star} for both of them, also i am just at chapter 33 so idk what happens at ex:page 114 or something happens idk what it is,i am just at page 33.let's start with world background,as far chapter 33, world building is justsecond coming of gluttony but watered down,it fantasy world with levels, that it really it and the levels do not made a difference,MC just one to two shot everything so why? have it at all? to be honest with you. i thought the world would be like idk a woods with fog and it night time all around at the start, and when the MC show to a town it just reveals to generic fantasy,what if? instead of fantasy it dark fantasy with horror, like the town is silent hill but in a fantasy setting and everyone is off,for word background {two star} for being second coming of gluttony butless interesting thing in the worldfar as story goes,MC get op almost at the start,then kill everything and get all the women in 30 feet radius of him,that it, very early on the MC get out as a demon two times but nothing happens,MC just run out town,no one comes get him,no wanted posters,nothing happens with it,might as well not have happened in the first,which is a problem that comes up over and over again,the MC can do the worst thing possible and nothing bad will ever come to him at all.{one star}character are just a mess,every one but MC and his women he simp toare just forgettable and bland,so to is the MC, but the MC is well the MCso you can some what remember him a little bit( i say that but i forgot his name lol )if you cut 60 to 70% of the character,the story well mostlystay the same,most character are just there to die,that it.for the MC idk what his deal is, he just kill anything, that not personality, that a hobby,he and female lead hate each other very much but for no reason at all?!?! that do 180 and love each other?!?!?!(one star)   WQ:3SOU:3SD:1CD:1WB:2the total score is 2.0 but maybe a 2.3 or2.4

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