Hello, this is my first book and I am getting better with each chapter. Either way, just because I wrote it does not mean I will not judge it fairly. I do think I could do better on telling more visual details, and yes I know it is focused a lot on the system for now however that is just so you can see his growth, that will be brought down a lot eventually. Other than describing visuals, I think I am doing pretty well. If you think I am wrong please leave comments or something on how I can do better. I look forward to hearing from you.
Great reading so far, i enjoy the developing characters , I enjoyed how the main character is rapidly progressing as we all wish we could. First love Is always a mystery , how long will it last, if it does
I'm on like the 5th chapter, but still, he just gets free points, jumps from rooftops to rooftops for what I would say his first time ever WHILE doing flips, goes on one date with a girl, and then the next time they meet they kiss and are bf gf. and the fact that there are 5 reviews from the SAME person while all being 5 starred.
it seemed interesting, but just lost it with all these things being randomly thrown in without any explanation.
I just got to first 5 chapter but story seems to be forced.
1. First time going with a date with a roommate's sister where roommate asked him to go to date. But, their father gets him kidnapped by Mafia just because he don't like his daughter going on a date with anyone and want to test MC.
2.Asking the boss of said Mafia to adopt him when he just wounded some of the Mafia members and Mafia boss agrees to it.
C'est incroyable comment sa va trop vite en a peine 3 chapitre le mc est deja surpuissant .ensuite le livre va si vite qu'on a meme pas le temps de connaitre la famille du mc ou qui est il qu'il a deja remplacer son pere biologique par le chef de la mafia.
i don't whether these are fake reviews or not but No.
this is definitely not a 5 star book.
there are alot of mistakes in grammar.
the first few chapters made me not want to read it anymore;
spoiler alert
I mean seriously?!
the MC gets kidnapped by a mafia leader then adopts him as his father?
Goes on ONE date then tells the girl I love you?
shows off like a noob to her father that he is a mage alchemist etc.. i mean why? you could hid some, just being a mge is enough why show off lol
Great story line, like the main characters introduction. It is also interesting to see the story develop. I am eager to read the next chapter when it comes out. I am hoping it is soon. Thank you.
Feels hurried whilst missing half the iNformation that was supposed to be given to the reader.
Also downright refuses commonsense.Ah i meed a gf ahhhh my roo,ate has decided i am to date his sister, since i am the most attractive student but did not know so myself, and so i go pick her up with a limousine, because i aM rich. did i forget That i am a noble? Yes? Well now you know.
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it seemed interesting, but just lost it with all these things being randomly thrown in without any explanation.
1. First time going with a date with a roommate's sister where roommate asked him to go to date. But, their father gets him kidnapped by Mafia just because he don't like his daughter going on a date with anyone and want to test MC.
2.Asking the boss of said Mafia to adopt him when he just wounded some of the Mafia members and Mafia boss agrees to it.
this is definitely not a 5 star book.
there are alot of mistakes in grammar.
the first few chapters made me not want to read it anymore;
spoiler alert
I mean seriously?!
the MC gets kidnapped by a mafia leader then adopts him as his father?
Goes on ONE date then tells the girl I love you?
shows off like a noob to her father that he is a mage alchemist etc.. i mean why? you could hid some, just being a mge is enough why show off lol
this is clearly a bad novel.
Read lots of better stories.
Feels hurried whilst missing half the iNformation that was supposed to be given to the reader.
Also downright refuses commonsense.Ah i meed a gf ahhhh my roo,ate has decided i am to date his sister, since i am the most attractive student but did not know so myself, and so i go pick her up with a limousine, because i aM rich. did i forget That i am a noble? Yes? Well now you know.