Hello Author! You did a good job on making a novel. I checked your profile and I was surprised to see that you are a girl. The way you wrote your story is better than most "boy authors" in this platform. I am going to give you my whole support (Power stones of my different accounts) since it was quite eccentric to know that a girl made this amazing novel (I am not discriminating women as a whole but I expected that women are quite proficient in making romantic novels )
The protagonist spends most of the chapters pretending to be cool but comes of like an edgelord
His companion praises him for doing ordinary and unremarkable things (I cringed every time)
However the writing is decent except for poor sentence structure (too much rambling and repetition)
Worldbuilding is shallow... what with the info dumps in a constant attempt to compensate
Plot is there and it is consistent for the most part but relies on the idiot ball tactic at times
Worst is the tone of the novel... almost all characters showcase snark and tantrums, dialogues sound immature and the tension is all but none existent... so it is no word i feel cringe almost every chapter
Overall well written but misguided... If only there wasn't such a blatant attempt at making everything look cool because often the result is the opposite
So there aren't that much chapter yet but What I read it is amazing!
I really love the plotline and hope that it continuous the in upcoming chapter .
It's definitely worth reading.
So there aren't that much chapter yet but What I read it is amazing!
I really love the plotline and hope that it continuous the in upcoming chapter .
It's definitely worth reading.
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The protagonist spends most of the chapters pretending to be cool but comes of like an edgelord
His companion praises him for doing ordinary and unremarkable things (I cringed every time)
However the writing is decent except for poor sentence structure (too much rambling and repetition)
Worldbuilding is shallow... what with the info dumps in a constant attempt to compensate
Plot is there and it is consistent for the most part but relies on the idiot ball tactic at times
Worst is the tone of the novel... almost all characters showcase snark and tantrums, dialogues sound immature and the tension is all but none existent... so it is no word i feel cringe almost every chapter
Overall well written but misguided... If only there wasn't such a blatant attempt at making everything look cool because often the result is the opposite
I really love the plotline and hope that it continuous the in upcoming chapter .
It's definitely worth reading.
I really love the plotline and hope that it continuous the in upcoming chapter .
It's definitely worth reading.