Honestly? This was really good. The pace was just right, something that many authors struggled with. The story building, the build up, the cliff hangers, everything was well written out. I hope I get to see more chapters from this author again! Good work!
The concept of the novel is interesting. It needs improvement on writing quality though; grammar and pronouns. For the characters, their traits are also interesting and I hope to see more developments. Overall, I think I had fun reading these early chapters. 🤔
In fact, he was sure that God didn't make it either. Thus, the whole bullsh*t universal statement that was written underneath the company's logo ("For the best of mankind") was exactly what he described it as: bullsh*t. And Lian Yin was 100% sure that there was a different motive in mind. Especially since the higher ups were VERY angry when they learned that he had his very own system, courtesy of a different "company." In fact, they were more angry about him having a system, rather than having not downloaded the system that all employees must download before entering the company.
world background doesnt exist, character design doesnt exist story development makes no sense. who even let this guy start writing? also theres no game element whatsoever, the supposed game he plays at the start also makes 0 sense as an "rpg"
through her once she pictured his appearance through from both incidents of when she young and just a day ago when he saved her again. The feeling of his hand ruffling her blood soaked golden
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